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The proportion of people's expenditure on six different goods and services in a European country



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Jul 11, 2021   #1

the proportion of people's total spending in a particular European country



The pie charts give information about the proportion of people's total expenditure on six different goods and services in a European country between 1958 and 2008. Overall, it is clear that spending on housing, travel and luxury goods increased while that of food, clothing and entertainment decreased over the period of 50 years.

Beginning with the percentage of people's total spending on housing in 1958, it accounted for 22%. Then 50 years later, this figure rose and housing became the biggest expense with 32%. Similarly, the expenditure on transport saw a considerable increase from 8% in 1958 to 17% in 2008. In addition, people just spent 7% of expense on luxury goods in 1958, but 50 years later the total grew remarkably to nearly one fifth.

In 1958, people spent the largest portion on food, with nearly one third. However, in 2008, the spending on food was a small minority in the total. The proportion of clothing witnessed a minimal decline from 18% to 16% during the period of 50 years. Similarly, the expenditure on entertainment in 1958 was 13%, but later fell to 6% in 2008.


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Holt  Educational Consultant - / 15385  
Jul 12, 2021   #2
The writer must always indicate the number of images whenever more than 1 image is provided, The images must be identified seperately in the summary and provided with individual summary information. That is because the images offer seperate information which are later collated in the report paragraphs. The weakest aspect of this report is the summary overview. The confusing summary overview of the images caused this problem.

The writer should learn to use terms that indicate comparisons between the years indicated. Rather than saying, "Then 50 years later ..." , it would be more writing and task appropriate to indicate " In comparison, there was a... 50 years later." The writer must keep in mind the audience of the report and use task /language appropriate references.


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