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The proportion of spendings on five different basic needs in several developed countries in 2009.


andika08 81 / 80 16  
Oct 29, 2016   #1
The bar chart gives the information about the proportion of spend on five different basic needs in several developed countries in 2009. Overall, housing was by far the most significant sector of all country's expenditures.

United stated far dominated the proportion of spend on both housing and healthcare at 27% and 7% respectively, but it was the lowest rate in food and clothing. At the same time, with more than a fifth, Japan predominated on food, while its the lowest percentage was seen in transportation. Meanwhile, Canada at 20 percent was the highest rate among all in transportation whereas it showed a very less proportion on housing.

On the other hand, there was a similar pattern was shown in the figure for USA and Canada in which the proportion of health care was higher than clothing. However, this was marked contrast to the trend of United Kingdom and Japan spending more budget on clothing than healthcare.




Beauty17 56 / 88 5  
Oct 29, 2016   #2
Hallo... nice to read your essay.. here my suggestion for you..

Overall, housing was by far the most significant ...

THE United stated (...) proportion of spendspent (in the past form refer to the year was in the past ) on both housing ...

On the other hand, there was were a similar patternwas shownshows in the figure for USA ... (It becomes plural form due to both countries, USA and Canada as the objects)

Hope it works! Good Luck!
faizunaa17 49 / 91  
Oct 29, 2016   #3
... about the proportion of spending money on five different basic needs in several developed countries in 2009

spend ---> verb , so must followed by noun if use "of" before that.

On the other hand, there waswere a similar pattern was shown shows in the figure for ...

plural

Overall is good. :)


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