IELTS TASK1 the proportion of two surveys in what skills are extremely essential

A breakdown of the proportion of two surveys in what skills are extremely essential for workers in different two years, 1997 and 2006, is presented in the given table. Overall, dealing with people was more favorable skills needed by employees in external communication; while in internal communication, making speech and presentation was considered less preference for working people. In this case, listening carefully and dealing with people were the most important skills required for stuffs in all year.

To begin, dealing with people was the considerable external communication skills for working inhabitants. Its rate stood at 60%, compared more than two times with selling a product or service in 1997. This then was followed a slight increase of 5% in the following 10 years. Meanwhile, selling a product or service showed the least external skills for officials standing at 24% at the first survey, but showing a stead fall to 21% in 2009.

Regarding to internal communication, listening carefully to colleagues was the most remarkable skills required for workers. Its trend was at 38% in 1997 and rose surprisingly by 9% in 10 year to come. On the other hand, making speech or presentation showed the least abilities for working people in which both of records were at 7% and 11% in different year of survey respectively.

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There is a lack of clarity in the way that you presented the discussion. However, the facts that you used were accurate so you knew what you needed to present, you just could not present it in the proper manner. That is a common problem among early practice test takers. It should improve over time with continued practice. Here are my notes on your essay.

... was A more favorable skills needed... making speech and presentation COMMUNICATION AND INTERACTION was considered less preference IMPORTANT for ...required for stuffs in all year. FOR EMPLOYMENT IN BOTH YEARS

... external communication skills for working inhabitants PEOPLE... ... was followed BY a slight... service WAS THE LEAT IMPORTANT showed the least external skills for officials ...a steadY fall...

Regarding to internal communication...most IMPORTANT SKILL remarkable skills required ... in 10 yearS to come . ... showed the WAS THE least abilities ABILITY REQUIRED for ... different yearS of survey respectively.