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The percentages of two different surveys outcome about the essential communication skills


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Sep 28, 2016   #1
The presented table provides the percentages of two different surveys outcome about the essential communication skills in internal and external area over 9 years. As it can be seen that mostly all the communication aspects was slightly increased, only selling a product or service went down than all the items of communication skills.

Knowledge and particular products or services was the highest enhancement in external communication. Followed by dealing with people that rose 5 % from its result before. Advising or caring for customers or clients showed its percentage in 1997 was 36 percent and by 2006 it had peaked into 39 %. 24 percent was displayed in 1997 by selling a product or service, although by 2006 it had gone down 3 % and made its position was the lowest improvement in external communication skill.

Internal communication which consisted of six items showed a dramatic enhancement from 1997 to 2006. Listening carefully to peers rocketed to 47 % in 2006. Next, analyzing problems together with others was 26 %, instructing or training people was 30 % and persuading or influencing others was 21 percent in 2006. Continued by making speeches and presentations rose 4 % than in 1997 and planning the activities of others was the lowest item with 1 % improvement that had showed by the end of 2006.



ichanpants89 [Contributor] 16 / 777 309  
Sep 28, 2016   #2
Hi Russell, here's my analysis towards your report summary of IELTS task 1. I hope you can follow through.

1st paragraph:
- The presented table provides the percentages of two different surveysoutcomes about the essential (...) over 9 years period .
- AsOverall, it can be seen that, mostly all the communication aspects waswere slightly increased, (...) service went down thancompared to all the items of communication skills.

- I assume that one more sentence is needed to complete the way that you present the information in the overview or introduction of your essay. Your mistake was compressing the information into the two sentences you presented.

2nd paragraph:
- ... products or services waswere the highest enhancements in external communication.
- It is followed by dealing with people that rose 5%(no space needed for percentage symbol) from its result beforethe previous result . (fragmented sentence, be careful)

- I reckon that similar mistakes appear here. Percentage symbol should not be separated from the number.

As you can see, several modifications and corrections have been applied in this essay. I hope you can do better in the next practice. Good luck :)


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