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[IELTS] proportion of watching television and videos (Australian children)



tiaDS 73 / 222  
Jun 20, 2014   #1
The graph below gives information about the preferred leisure activities of Australian children.
Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown.


The bar chart compares how Australian children spend their spare time in the different activities and it measured in percent, between girls and boys group aged 5-14.

It is noticeable that watching television or videos is the popular activities for both sexes. Whereas almost all activities are dominated by boys, only in the art and craft activities has lower percentage than the figure of girls.

With regard to outdoor activities, boys' figure holds higher percentage than girls in the skateboarding or rollerblading activities, at just under 40 and just over 20 percent. Moreover, the boys also prefer to ride a bike if compare to the girls.

Turning to indoor activities, the proportion of watching television and videos for both sexes beats the same figure at 100%. However, electronic or computer games are predominately an activity by boys rather than girls, at around 81 and 60 percent. The percentage of women, the art and craft activities, is the highest in, though like boys only have approximately 35%.


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Cute Scott 3 / 3  
Jun 20, 2014   #2
Try to exemplify your assertion
OP tiaDS 73 / 222  
Jun 20, 2014   #3
could you give me some examples?
I will give good responses to improve my writing if your advice is knowledgeable. thanks in advance.
hillard214james 2 / 6  
Jun 23, 2014   #4
Everything was tackled appropriately and relevant contrast/comparison was made. However, a conclusion regarding the whole trend would have made a better finale. (:


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