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What are the purposes of places such as museums and how should they be funded?--IELTS



Jennifer Zhang 9 / 24  
May 18, 2011   #1
What are the purposes of places such as museums and how should they be funded?

It is not uncommon to find a variety of museums, such as history museums, science museums, art galleries or even some private museums whenever an individual goes to visit a city. In fact, museums have become an integral part of a local place's cultural development.

Museums serve proposes in terms of education, entertainment as well as cultural and historical heritage preservation. From the perspective of education, museums provide visitors with first-hand experience of antiques or artworks, from which they can connect what they have learnt via books, the Internet or schooling to what they see in museums. Thus, museums can stimulate people's interests and enthusiasm in new areas, inspiring them to explore knowledge more deeply. Also, museums afford visitors a sense of entertainment and amusement. With technological advances, visitors have more access to exhibitions in diverse forms, which means people are more available to a multi-sensory journey in museums. When it comes to the preservation of local historical and cultural heritage, museums also play a pivotal role. In fact, some well-known museums are regarded as indispensible scenic spots by travelers, promoting the reputation of local culture.

However, many museums are still lack of adequate funding to operate today, especially for some newly-built ones. Personally, I suggest that the government should allocate appropriate proportion of its expenditure to local museums, improving their infrastructure to serve the public better. Besides, museums are supposed to depend on their own strengths, exploiting potential market by selling souvenirs, such as booklets of exhibits or specific handicrafts. In this way, museums would fund for themselves and, at the same time, meet their visitors' demand.

isai 12 / 111  
May 18, 2011   #2
Greetings !

Very good work which is clearly written, well argued and covers the subject matter in a
thorough, thoughtful and competent manner.

Regards
lastielts 3 / 5  
May 19, 2011   #3
Hi Jenny,

1. You are a very good writer.You will achieve the band score you require.
2.Lexical source,Grammar and vocabulary are excellent.
3.Essay is cohesive.

Good Luck with your exams!
I have written an essay about the topic optimism in 21st century you already wrote please give me your feedback.

Regards,Vinu.
EF_Kevin 8 / 13053  
May 20, 2011   #4
Hi Jennifer, I don't know how tough the ietls is, but I am pretty confident that you'll do well. This is good writing.

Museums serve proposes in terms of education, entertainment, as well as and cultural and historical heritage preservation.
Or...
Museums serve proposes in terms of education and entertainment as well as cultural and historical heritage preservation.
Either of those (above) is fine.

Use lack as a verb:
However, many museums are still lack of adequate funding to...

Or use it as a noun:
However, many museums still have a lack of adequate funding ...

:-) Thanks for for all your participation lately!


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