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people visit museums when they travel to new places; 'curiosity about ancestors'


vaishali1980 26 / 83  
Jun 28, 2010   #1
Please give me suggestion and correction of my essay.

Museum is a place where presents us the history, culture and creativity. There are many reasons that people like to visit museums.

The first reason is some people like to study history. For people who learning and studying history, museum is a wonderful place.
Museum is giving you much deeper visual stimulation so as to make you better to understand the history. As well as people like to know more about local people and their history. When people visit new places, they don't know much about people over there; their appearance, activities, foods, cloths and jewelery. There is no doubt, local museum is the best choice for us to get a clue about them, their culture and history.

The second reason is curiosity about human ancestors. Some museums are exhibition of ancestors' belongings, how they lived, what they wore and so on. The museum presents more information to find out the answers to many question related to our ancestors.

The third and most important reason is people like to experience creativity. Some museums represent arts and creativity. Some people like to watch and admire artist's knowledge. For example in London, Madame Tussaud is a very famous museum for wax statue. Museum has famous people's statue. People always visit there to see artistic works.

As a result, museum is a best place to spend holiday with children. To spend a great vacation and get knowledge, people like to visit museums when they travel to new places.

cathyliu 19 / 54  
Jun 29, 2010   #2
Museum is ^a place where people can see history, culture and creativity. There are many reasons that people like to visit museums .

Museum is a good place where presents us the histroy, cultures and ...

The first reason is some people like to study history.

For people who enjoy learning and studying history, museum is abbsolutely a fantasic spot. Here, what you receive are not only literal narrations but also vivid pictures or true objects, thereby giving you much deeper visual stimulation so as to make you better to understand the history.

When we come to a new place,the local museum no doubt is the best choice for us to get a clue about its culture and history.
silkesha 4 / 24  
Jun 29, 2010   #3
I've done some minimal corrections...this one is really good!..much better than your previous essays!...
one advice...don't use the word 'ancestor' so many times...use some other word instead of it...also, at a few places, it doesn't fit well...try plugging in some other word...

anyways, I liked it!...keep writing!...
EF_Kevin 8 / 13,339 129  
Jun 30, 2010   #4
A museum is place where people can see history, culture and creativity. There are many reasons that people People like to visit museums for many reasons.

Additionally, people like to know more about local people and their history.

People always visit to see artists' work there.

As a result, a m useum is one of the best places to spend holidays with children and ...

Very good!! Your writing is almost perfect.


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