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Qualities of a good son/daughter? - Cultural influence and Time factor


marmaria 10 / 30 5  
Sep 23, 2013   #1
What are the important qualities of a good son or daughter? Have these qualities change or remain the same over time in your culture? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

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The definition of a good child differs between societies and cultures, but in my country an obedient and kind person would be considered as a good son or daughter.

Parents always expect their children to obey them. No matter how old they are. They cannot bear their children's disobedience even if they are married. They interpret in most of their important decisions like choosing major, career or even marriage. I think nowadays children in most countries do not obey their parents like their ancestors. Since they become eighteen years old, they prefer to choose their own way and live based on their own criteria rather than their parents'. Experiencing conflict between my ideas and my parents', I mostly follow my parents. Although you would say I should make my own decisions but I think my parents would not mislead me. Also it satisfies me when I see they are happy around me.

I usually try to treat kindly with my mother, the same behavior she showed when I was young and I needed her assist. She used to give love and kindness to me, and I think it is now the time for me to treat the same way. Everyday my mother calls and asks me to take her to buy fresh vegetables. I know that is easier for me to go shopping once a week, but when I see how happy my mother is when I take her out, I become happy too. I think if I behave kindly with my parents, in return my children would behave in the same way with me when I become old. I see most of my friends are behaving in the same way, so fortunately kindness is still considered a value in our society.

Beside the effect of culture, time is other important factor is definition of values in a society. Kindness was considered not only a character of a good child, but also a character of a good person and it still remains as valuable as 100 years before. Children used to obey their parents and imply their opinions in their decisions, but nowadays most children make their own decisions without consulting.

cactus2601 3 / 12  
Sep 23, 2013   #2
The definition of a good child differs between societies and cultures, but in my country an obedient and kind person would be considered as a good son or daughter.

This is rather confusing :).
Maybe it will help you.
dumi 1 / 6,928 1592  
Sep 26, 2013   #3
The definition of a good child differs between societies and cultures, but in my country an obedient and kind person would be considered as a good son or daughter.

Good opening :)
The definition of a good child differs between cultures. However, in my culture, obedience and kindness are considered be the mandatory qualities of a good son or daughter. .... I tried align that line more with the prompt.

Parents always expect their children to obey them. No matterno matter how old they are.

.... you need to combine the two sentences.

They cannot bear their children's disobedience even if theytheir children are married.

.... here there is a confusion as to whom you refer by "they" (parents or children). That's reason why I made that suggestion.

I think nowadays children in most countries do not obey their parents like their ancestors

... this idea comes bit rigidly without having a good connection with the previous line. Set up a sound line.
However, now it can be seen that younger generation is drifting away from this cultural norm. They, like the children in most of other countries, do not really care about what their elders feel and wish to be independent in making their decisions.
OP marmaria 10 / 30 5  
Sep 26, 2013   #4
Thanks dear dummi. I have an exam just 3 days later. But I will continue cisiting this foroum because it is really helpful . your comments are really useful for me. do you think I can get 20 out of 30? please be honest. I have not uploaded my rewen writings. I am writing 5 essays these days, this forum encouraged me to write and read more.
dumi 1 / 6,928 1592  
Sep 26, 2013   #5
Of course your essay displays good writing skills, especially with the sentences construction and vocabulary. You can score more if you pay more attention to the essay structure.

I will visit your other essays too and give feedbacks now (since you have only a few dates left)
Have confidence, you can easily score 20/30 and may be even more if you follow this structure. Be mindful about time and do not lengthen your essay unnecessarily. Good luck!


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