Sunii, as far as creative writing goes, this is a pretty decent written presentation. I can feel your heart in the words that you wrote and the pain that you felt during those instances of heartbreak. Regardless of the grammar mistakes, your imagination comes through clearly, and your message is heartfelt. You do not have a problem when it comes to expressing yourself in this essay. You do have a problem when it comes to sentence structure and connecting word usage.
One example of a problem in your writing can be seen in this quote:
I am here mean to say both inner and outer beauty.
- The proper sentence structure for this is: I mean to say both her inner and outer beauty
. There is no need to say "I am here" because, as the writer, your presence is already granted by default.
I have devastating past about the relationship
- It would have been better to say "This relationship is part of my devastated past" or "This relationship devastated me"
Now, when you mention culturally specific instances such as the game of Antakshari, you need to remind yourself that the reader may not be familiar with the game or term so you need to present it in a manner that helps the reader understand the relevance of the game to the situation or merely explain the game to the reader.
There are several other grammar problems, sentence structure problems, and references that need to be corrected here but I can't do it all for you. However, I have pointed out one sample of each problem that you need to pay attention to the next time you write. I strongly suggest that you type your next essay using he latest version of MS Word as this software includes immediate grammar correction and sentence structuring advice which can help you create better essays by correcting your mistakes and teaching you about the grammar and sentence structure rules at the same time.