The rates of crime and how these rates altered in three different places in Panama city

changes in Panama city from 2010 to 2019

The line graph illustrates the rates of crime and how these rates altered which occurred in three different places in panama city between 2010 and 2019.

Overall, there was a fluctuation in the number of incidents causing by car theft and robbery examined;meanwhile, the figures for burglary saw a dramatic drop.In addition, burglary constantly had the lowest figures throughout the period.

The amount of happenings relating to burglary started at about 3400,after which it witnessed a rapid decrease to exactly 1000 in 2015.Similar changes can be seen in the figures for car theft and robbery, which fell from roughly 2800 and 700 to around 2100 and precisely in the first 5 years.

From 2005 to 2019, the quantity of car theft cases increased considerable, reaching around 2800 to become the main reason for the number of incidents towards the end of the period.The figures for burglary and robbery saw the similar changes, but to lesser extents, growing to roughly 1500 and 700 in the final year respectively.

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