A few points
The chart gives information regarding the number of incidents in different locations in Newport city center between 2003 and 2010. Overall, the most striking point is that all of areas experienced a downward trend throughout the whole period in the question. However, the figure of crime rate in burglary decreased dramatically after peaking at the second year.
I think I should rewrite this paragraph, since the accuracy of the report presented cannot be verified. A closer look at my model sentences:The line chart gives a breakdown of the changes from criminal rates in city center of Newport from 2003 to 2012, a 9-year period. Overall, while the rate of burglary shows downwards, car theft experiences a slight increase. However, the trend of robbery remains unchanged over the time frame.
Sentence 1 should be "...burglary RECORDED the highest number of crime RATES..."
Sentence 2 should be "...the initial number amounted to 3,500 in 2003... before ITS figure..."
Sentence 3 should be "...this WAS SIGNS OF AN INCREASE RECOVERY TO the same figure.."
Sentence 1 should be "... BY far..."
Sentence 2 should be "... before showing a gradual rebound to the 2003 figure..."
if we analyze the data ( a comma ) we can see...
My advice: always save your time around 3-5 minutes for proofreading prior to ending your report. Hope this helps, eddy suaib.