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"Reasons for study" four out of five people under 26 take part in courses because of job opportunity



Windvalley 5 / 5  
Sep 15, 2016   #1
IELTS writting task 1_"Reasons for study"

The first bar graph illustrates the percentage of students in different age groups, who study for career or interest, while the second one compares the support received from their employer.

What stands out from the charts is that a majority of young people study because of career. On the other hand, they also generally receive more support from their companies than middle age and elderly people

As can be seen, four out of five people under 26 take part in courses because of job opportunity, compared to only 10% for passion. Similarly, Almost 70% students between 26 and 29 admit they study for career rather than interest. As regards the age group of 30-39, twice as many as participants in the survey said their studying motivation mostly related to their career than preference.

An interesting point is that the proportion of student studying for career as many as that for interest, at 50%. If we look at the age group over 49, It follows a considerable different trend, with nearly a quarter of the respondents said they prefer studying because of hobby than work.

In terms of working hour and financial aid, top of the list were students under 26, with 60% have the supports from their employers. The age group of 26-29, over 49, and 40s come next, at 48%, 40%, and 32% respectively. Last on the list is people between 30 and 39, who do not receive as much as support from their employers than the others, at only 30%


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swr10 10 / 14  
Sep 15, 2016   #2
The first bar graph illustrates the percentage of students in different age groups , who study for career or interest, while the second one compares the support received from their employer --> employers . What stands out from the charts is that a majority of young people study because of their career. On the other hand, they generally receive more support from their companies.

-->> give a space

As can be seen, four out of five people under 26 take part in courses because of job opportunity, compared to only 10% for passion. Similarly, Almost -->almost 70% students between 26 and 29 admit they study for career rather than interest. As regards the age group of 30-39, twice as many as participants in the survey said their studying motivation mostly related to their career than preference. An interesting point is that the proportion of student studying for career as many as that for interest, at 50%. If we look at the age group over 49, It follows a considerable different trend, with nearly a quarter of the respondents said they prefer studying because of hobby than work.

--> > give a space

In terms of working hour and financial aid, top of the list were students under 26, with 60% have the supports from their employers. The age group of 26-29, over 49, and 40s come next, at 48%, 40%, and 32% respectively. Last on the list is people between 30 and 39, who do not receive as much as support from their employers than the others, at only 30%
David54 15 / 20  
Sep 15, 2016   #3
Hallo Windvalley,

There are a little corrective,
...majority of young people study because of careerthey want to have career improvement ....
...four out of five people under 26 was took a take part in courses because of job opportunAs regards the age group of 30-39, twice ...as many as participants in the survey said that their studying motivation mostly related to their career than preference....

...If we looked at the age group over 49....
...they prefer studying because of hobby rather than work....


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