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Relying more on technology to solve problems let human ability deteriorate.


pedramcontrol 2 / 2  
Mar 30, 2014   #1
GRE Issue Topic:
"As people rely more on technology to solve problems, the ability of humans to think for themselves will surely deteriorate"
Essay:
This technology dependency issue is partly right for some specific people who are practicing their rudimentary academic skills; on the contrary technology has helped lots of people to live an easier life and even make more rational decisions.

We can divide humans into two broad categories; first category includes creative people, who by means of their mental ability makes innovative approaches to overcome human being natural faults and flaws;second category, which I call consumers, are people who make use of the first category achievements.

While the first category is immune to losing thinking ability, the second category can be vulnerable to this thinking deterioration.The second category comprised of two sub-categories called "academic part" and "non-academic part".

The so-called "non-academic part" is somehow immune to this deterioration, but if wrongly utilized, technology can worsen thinking ability of "academic part"; for instance, misusing calculator or computer by "academic part" exacerbates the vision needed to become a member of first category.

As I have discussed earlier, technology, on the whole, does not have negative effect on human thinking ability except when misused during rudimentary academic practicing.

Priya1 1 / 3  
Mar 30, 2014   #2
Give examples to support your reason.
niesaysi 16 / 284 83  
Mar 30, 2014   #3
This technology dependency issue is partly right for some specific people who are practicing their rudimentary academic skills;

This does not support the issue you are supposed to discuss.

As I have discussed earlier, technology, on the whole, does not have negative effect on human thinking ability except when misused during rudimentary academic practicing.

I am too with Priya. This is a good conclusion. However, you have to provide more examples to further discuss the topic. It seems that you have just pointed out the types of humans who will be affected by technology dependency. You better give more emphasis on how too much dependency on technology deteriorates the THINKING ABILITY OF HUMANS.

Good point: Structurally, you write well.


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