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IELTS task 1 report on Dairy products



summerchilld 1 / 1  
Jan 13, 2024   #1
The report below is my answer to the charts attached. I would be really thankful if you give me feedback (and maybe the possible band). Thank you so much!!!

The charts highlight data on the ranking of the global top three producers of four different dairy products: milk, cheese, butter, and milk powder in the year of 2012.

Overall, it can be seen that milk and milk powder were the two market that producers held balance shares, while in that of cheese and butter, there was a huge gap between the number-one producers and their runner-ups. Another striking point is that in the world of dairy producers, EU countries, and the US contributed the most in total of the four products.

In the milk industry EU took the lead with the massive number of 142,970 MT of milk produced, being 20,000 MT more than the second-placed, India, while the US came third with 90,000 MT. Meanwhile, when it comes to the milk powder market, it is China who finished first as they contributed 1200 MT milk powder to the world. New Zealand were closely behind with 30,000 MT of powder left. However, the EU nations, only produced 770 MT, being a half of that of China.

Moving on to the other two market, EU countries and the US are still giants. In the cheese market, although Brazil's production were as little as 700 MT, that of the US were just under 5000 MT, creating a considerable leap in terms of mass production. What is more, EU producers finished at an even bigger number of over 7000 MT, which was 10 times bigger than that of Brazil. Finally, India although topped the chart in butter production with 4,500 MT, EU and the US are still in the top three with 2040 and 810 MT of butter contributed to the world, respectively.

From the chart, it can be deduced that milk and cheese are the two most widespread dairy products.


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Holt  Educational Consultant - / 15460  
Jan 14, 2024   #2
The charts

There are pie charts and there are bar charts. You need to specifically identify the image type to meet image description requirements as a major part of your TA score.

You are over stating the trends in the report to the point where you are offering an analysis already rather than a simple direction of growth or decrease of growth. You will lose points for not providing a proper trending statement. Specifics should be in the analysis paragraphs.

massive number

Do not exaggerate the information from the image. The examiners need you to stay on point and focused only on accurate data delivery. Using over statements will not help your score. You consistently over emphasize in your presentation so you will have a problem with your C+C scoring considerations.
OP summerchilld 1 / 1  
Jan 14, 2024   #3
@Holt
I want to say thank you so much for your assessment. Would it be fine if I create another thread of the report's second draft? You may not create a new thread on an updated topic; you may make the current one Urgent and post it in the original topic for a new review, thank you! EF


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