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Respecting teachers today vs in the past



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Apr 17, 2019   #1

opinions about teachers



Teachers play an important role in the development of their society. Nowadays teaching is a basic foundation for a good society. Some people believe that teachers were appreciated by society in the past, others disagree. In my opinion, the teachers are more respectful than the past by people and community; it is important for two main reasons.

First of all, today's parent pays more attention to their children's education as a result of that society is developed in comparison to the past. Teachers play an important role in the future of children so society and people are about the teachers more and more every day if the people and community don't respect to the teachers, they will not able to do their responsibility good and the teachers can't provide a good opportunity to students to improve their ability.

Secondly, as the population is growing and the cities are crowded, it is needed to pay attention to breed good teachers because success teacher has a significant effect on the future of students so this student can be more creative and successes. It seems the teachers have low salary today and in the past, they have high rate salary and they experience had a better quality of life. the students spend most of their time on the classes with their teacher so the students valued them. For instance, the student gives some gifts to their teachers.

In conclusion, I strongly agree with this statement that the teachers are respected today as the past even more. It is important to care about the teachers all of the time, however, the people pay attention to the teachers nowadays because the futures of their children are very important for them. The society are developed nowadays and technology is improving so it is necessary to care more about the teachers as a result of that the student can be more creative. the government and the people pay attention to the teachers because it is important for the level of their society. That's why the teacher is respected todays more than the past.

Maria - / 1096  
Apr 17, 2019   #2
I like your composition. The simplicity of your language wonderfully plays out; it enables the readers to have a better grasp of what your thoughts are. Keep it up. I do have a couple of recommendations regarding content that you may apply if you see fit.

I would evade using language (or words/phrases) that is informal. Although this is not necessarily a horrendous idea considering that it can help tone down your essay's structure, I would still suggest that you try to be as strict as possible when it comes to the development of your language.

Let's take a look at your second paragraph.

I can revise the second sentence as:
Teachers play vital roles in the future of children. This is accompanied by the increasing attention given to the educational sectors. This, in turn, has also caused parents to develop a deep sense of respect for teachers. If these educators are irresponsible in their field, students won't optimize their potential skills.

Notice how I had played around with language and composition. Doing this can help your essay become more creative when it comes to finding a direction. Doing this can also improve your essay's direction when it comes to reaching a particular conclusion every time you end your paragraph.

A general exercise that I give out is to read out your essay out loud. Be as unbiased as you possibly can be. If you still have questions regarding the content, then it warrants that you should revise your essay's substance.

I would recommend applying these comments throughout your essay.

I also recommend to be clearer in your utterances in your concluding remarks. There was no mention of the impact of technological changes to the educational viewpoint of parents and teachers anywhere else in the essay other than here. When you're providing conclusion, it should encompass and provide a briefing of details that you have already tackled. Doing this can help your essay develop more in-depth content.

Best of luck.


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