i wanna know what are my errors and how i can improve my statements
When I was a child I used to read novels from time to time. Whenever I got back home from school I had a novel book In my hand which I had borrowed it from high school library, I used to read them with enthusiasm, at that time this was my favorite and only hobby. When I got a little older specially when I was in high school I liked playing computer games a lot. I remember once I played them for 24 straight hours. When I got older specially after I came to Rome I didn't like playing computer games anymore, I wanted to have girlfriend but this time situation was a bit different it was hard thing to do and simply I didn't find courage within myself to ask a girl out. now my hobbies are completely different, thanks god that I realized the importance of time, after thinking a lot about past I recognized that a hobby shouldn't only fill your leisure time, it shouldn't give you only pleasure it should gain you something valuable such as new information or knowledge or money. Here are my new hobbies: Swimming in the pool, when I was a child I craved swimming a lot but my hometown hadn't had any pool so I couldn't swim, now my dream has come true, in Rome there are a lot of good swimming pools with appropriate level of hygiene, second hobby is watching English movies, I do this because while I am having fun I learn a lot of things too such as getting familiar with new English statements that I haven't heard before. I simply note new word and statement and surprisingly I use them right now while I am writing this article.
When I was a child I used to read novels from time to time. Whenever I got back home from school I had a novel book In my hand which I had borrowed it from high school library, I used to read them with enthusiasm, at that time this was my favorite and only hobby. When I got a little older specially when I was in high school I liked playing computer games a lot. I remember once I played them for 24 straight hours. When I got older specially after I came to Rome I didn't like playing computer games anymore, I wanted to have girlfriend but this time situation was a bit different it was hard thing to do and simply I didn't find courage within myself to ask a girl out. now my hobbies are completely different, thanks god that I realized the importance of time, after thinking a lot about past I recognized that a hobby shouldn't only fill your leisure time, it shouldn't give you only pleasure it should gain you something valuable such as new information or knowledge or money. Here are my new hobbies: Swimming in the pool, when I was a child I craved swimming a lot but my hometown hadn't had any pool so I couldn't swim, now my dream has come true, in Rome there are a lot of good swimming pools with appropriate level of hygiene, second hobby is watching English movies, I do this because while I am having fun I learn a lot of things too such as getting familiar with new English statements that I haven't heard before. I simply note new word and statement and surprisingly I use them right now while I am writing this article.