hey John,
thanks for the advice. I am a bit confused though. So i guess I should stick with the original
structure afterall. It is evident that I am not that confident yet with my works.
What do you think of my hook sentence on th intro paragraph? Do you have any suggestions on it.
Did you find many irrelevant statements on my essay? I appreciate your feedback.
I've posted this elsewhere: If you can find me a single essay from a credible source (ie, NY Times, etc.) that lists in its introduction the "points to be covered," I will send you ten US dollars.
guess what,you have told this statement twice to the same forumer..and that forumer is me..I think it's really meant for me.
Cheers!