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IELTS2 When you are in Rome, do as the Romans do; visitors should follow local customs and behaviour


jaemie 1 / 2  
May 21, 2023   #1
Some people believe that visitors to other countries should follow local customs and behaviour. Others disagree and think that the host country should welcome cultural differences.

Discuss both these views and give your opinion.



It is strongly held in a belief that when you are in Rome, do as the Romans do when you travel to different countries, however, some others believes that the citizens of the host country also should be open-minded to other cultural diversities. This essay will discuss both views in detail and give the conclusion.

On the one hand, following suit to the traditions of a country is believed to be the stolid proof indicating that travellers are respectful to other different cultures and assisting to broaden your horizon about the new civilization. For instance, when you traverse to a destination, you do not have any foggiest idea about their social norms, you want to ask for a direction to somewhere but gesticulating a strange gesture considered impoliteness in the host country, the local citizens would not want to guide you anymore because your manners make them feel offended. Therefore, precedent investigating about your destination is profoundly critical.

On the other hand, every individual is explicitly nurtured in multi-cultural surroundings, thus their perceptions and social manners are not the same, that's why they cannot gain an insight into other's customs. However, if the local habitants don't criticize but welcomely to impart the visitors what are your customs and traditions and address how vital they are in your nation, it would render an attraction about the local hospitable behaviours that rivets a good image to the travellers which bring them back to your country consecutive times, creating a great deal of beneficial aspects in terms of tourism and economy.

In conclusion, I do believe that the holidaymakers themselves should invest a bit of their time to explore about other civilizations before visiting, hence the host habitant should also be more sociable and transmit their civilizational customs and value in a friendly way.
Holt  Educational Consultant - / 14,956 4810  
May 22, 2023   #2
when you are in Rome, do as the Romans do when you travel to different countries

This is a totally incorrect reference to the saying. The correct saying is simply; " When in Rome, do as the Romans do." It is clear that you are not familiar with this saying so you ended up using it in an incorrect way. While I commend your effort in using the saying, the examiner will still reduce the scores in the GRA and C + C sections. The reason being that your usage left the reader confused as the reference deviates from the original content.

This essay will discuss

The essay requires you to provide your own opinion. As such your score for this part will be O as you failed to provide a summarized opinion. The paragraph has not fully met the writer's opinion requirements.

Moving on to the overall reasoning, the format used became one sided instead of comparative.As such the essay can only be given one out of three scoring considerations. This is not a passing score essay.
OP jaemie 1 / 2  
May 22, 2023   #3
@Holt
Thanks for your feedback.


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