It is often said that that songs help to connect others around the world. Do you agree?

music is a good way of bringing people of different cultures and ages together

It is often said that that songs help to connect others around the world. Personally, I totally agree that it would be a good idea and the reasons are as follows.

On the one hand, there are a variety of songs written about the phenomena and events of our planet that would attract people of different countries and ages. Firstly, the lyrics of these songs represent the same spirit of humanity. It makes us have the same views of everything around our life and brings people together. Secondly, most of these songs usually have catchy melodies and easy-understood lyrics to sing along to. This can be illustrated by the song named "Waka-waka", the theme song of World Cup 2014 competition. Not only did it make people sway along to "Waka-waka" but it also showed the spirit of sporty lovers on this planet.

On the other hand, some people explore and make friends in other cultures by listening to music. Undoubtedly, songs in each country have their own characteristics, including: rhythm, language and meaning of lyrics. After understanding other nations through the music, listeners can easily visualize their citizens. People create relationships with foreign friends, who have the same favorite music as well as they understand a part of that person's personality. However, some songs that are contrary to the traditions would make a bad impression of people in other countries.

In conclusion, I believe that an easy way to come closer, even with cultural or age differences, is through music.

Essays in this task that have at least 275-300 words in it tend to get better scoring considerations overall as it highlights better developed or explained paragraphs. It provides more clarity to the discussion hence, a higher score in each section.


You will have a much clearer opinion presentation and TA score if you present the 2 supporting topics beforehand. It will set the tone of your opinion and allow a proper overview of the discussion paragraphs.

Avoid making comparative discussions within essays that ask for a single opinion for the presentation. The test requires you to prove that you can defend your opinion based on acceptable reasons. If the essay instruction does not indicate any of the following, then it is not a comparative essay :

Compare and contrast
Discuss both the advantage and disadvantage
Discuss both views

The reasoning development should only be in a single point of view for all prompts that do not provide the above discussion format/requirement.

First of all, you should check your writing thoroughly so that you won't lose marks on Grammatical Range and Accuracy:
It is often said that that songs help to ...
... make a bad impression of on people ...
Secondly, you mentioned this piece of argument in your paragraph:
However, some songs that are contrary to the traditions would ...
I strongly advise you not to do this because it goes against your initial point of views in your essay. You could only mention it when you want to create a counter-argument as a way to strengthen your argument or when the instructions require you to make a comparative essay

Thirdly, some of your arguments seem a little bit off and vague:
In conclusion, I believe that an easy way to come closer, even ...
Do you mean that an easy way to connect people of different cultures and ages is through music?
And finally, I suggest you write an essay that has 275 and above words since I believe that it would make your essay to be more precise and persuasive.