Hi @anonym28
First of all, please insert the prompt so that essay forum members are able to give you required solutions. However, i will give you several suggestions.
taking an example, according to the specialist, this power could be replace the use of natural resources such as coal, oil, and gas.
you managed to use research sources in your body paragraph, but it is unclear because you do not include the exact and clear sources that may be a journal or article from news.
In your body two paragraph, the final sentence does not balance your explanation
In your conclusion, you are able to conclude essay based on your thesis statement and main ideas rather than just write normative sentences.
In academic writing, please avoid using contractions.
hope it helps you