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Similarities of Love and Jealousy in today's society - Dreaded Shakespear



EF_Simone 2 / 1975  
Jul 18, 2009   #41
Hmmm... I think what your teacher is saying is that you substituted summarization for explanation. In other words, you said a lot but never really explained your thesis.

"Sounds too conversational" means that your language is not sufficiently formal. This may also refer to lack of organization or structure.

EF_Sean 6 / 3460  
Jul 18, 2009   #42
The last two are elements of style that you can fix fairly easily by good proofreading. The first one is more content related, though, and is closer to what I was talking about.


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