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IELTS ; Single Career or Multi Career? More Careers are more beneficial!



rombos 4 / 6  
Feb 19, 2013   #1
The idea of having a single career is becoming an old fashioned one. The new fashion will be to have several careers or ways of earning money and further education will be something continues as throughout life.

Nowadays, advancements in technology have changed the trend among people to choose their field of work unprecedentedly. Compared to the past, almost all having multiple careers and try to learn new traits as much as they can throughout their life. We could not see this trend in the bygone days. This essay focuses on the advantages of new trend and its effects in people's life.

First and foremost, multicarriers have changed people's life in a positive manner. They start earn much more money than a single career person. It is always better to master in two or more traits. So, he can work better than the other with a single work experience. For instance, a man, who has both computer and mathematical knowledge can work better than a person who has only mathematical skills.

Secondly, learning throughout the life surely makes a person successful in his work area. By learning, one can update his knowledge dramatically. Moreover, he can apply it in to his area of work. For example, learning sophisticated software and skills in photography, a photographer can depict beautiful photos. In contrast, studies always help the individual to improve his confidence level sharply and can tackle the problems easily, which happen in his duty.

From the above points, it is crystal clear that a person with two or more careers and learning throughout life surely help him to reach the pinnacle of success. I hope this change is an inception of better tomorrow.

william731 18 / 43  
Feb 19, 2013   #2
Nowadays, advancements in technology have changed the trend among people to choose their field of work unprecedentedly.

How advancement in technology relates to the choices of work. You should explain a bit.

multicarriers have changed people's life in a positive manner

I am not quite familiar with the word "multicarriers".

In contrast, studies always help the individual to improve his confidence level sharply and can tackle the problems easily, which happen in his duty.

Should be " in addition" right?
dumi 1 / 6795  
Feb 19, 2013   #3
learn new traits

new skills

They start earn much more money than a single career person .

.... wish you present this slighlty differently;
They help earn more money than a single career.

It is always better to master in two or more traitsskills.

ByThrough continuous learning , one can update his knowledge dramatically.

Secondly, learning throughout the life surely makes a person successful in his work area. By learning, one can update his knowledge dramatically. Moreover, he can apply it in to his area of work. For example, learning sophisticated software and skills in photography, a photographer can depict beautiful photos. In contrast, studies always help the individual to improve his confidence level sharply and can tackle the problems easily, which happen in his duty.

Here, I find less alignment with your topic. Actually you try to show "learning" as an advantage of multicareer, but it is not explicitly conveyed.

Overall, you display excellent writing skills :)
Pahan 1 / 1824  
Feb 19, 2013   #4
The new fashion will be to have several careers or ways of earning money and further education will be something continues as throughout life.

There are some grammatical errors this sentence.
The new trend is to have several careers or sources of earning money. Further education has turned into something you continue throughout life.

This essay focuses on the advantages of new trend and its effects in people's life.

I do not think this is necessary.

First and foremost, multicarriers have changed people's life in a positive manner.

It must be lives since you are talking about a lot of people. Keep everything in plural.
Firstly, having many careers have changed peoples lives in a positive manner.

You can mention some disadvantages also if necessary. Multitasking is dangerous and not everyone can do it properly. Some people are better of concentrating on one thing.


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