The table represents information about percentage of pupils attending four secondary school types between 2000 and 2009. Overall, specialist schools, grammar schools and voluntary-controlled schools are programs in which gradually during 9 years. It is importance to notice that only community schools were increased dramatically. Between 2000 and 2009, grammar schools and specialist schools are decreased. Both of them fell from 12 percent to one in ten and from less than a quarter to 12 percent. Furthermore, specialist schools decreased gradually by 1 percent in each 2005 and 2009. At the same time, voluntary-controlled decreased dramatically from approximately a half to one-fifth. On the contrary, community schools always increase dramatically from 12 percent in 2000 to more than a half in 2009.
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