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We stand together looking at the flag; What does patriotism mean to me?



oksanavy7 1 / 6  
Sep 22, 2013   #1
What Patriotism Mean To Me?
We stand together looking at the flag and an uncontainable pride fills us, the type of pride that will always be with us. The type of pride that can only mean one thing; true patriotism.

"Is life so dear or peace so sweet as to be purchased at the price of chains and slavery? Forbid it, Almighty God. I know not what course others may take, but as for me, give me liberty or give me death!" These famous words said by Patrick Henry during a meeting with the Virginia House of Burgess while discussing what actions to take during the war. Patrick Henry must have had that overwhelming feeling of pride while saying these words.

True patriotism will do everything for the sake of the country even if it meant sacrifice. All those brave soldiers out in the battle fields did not risk their lives for nothing; they fought because of their patriotism. It drives us like the Olympic athlete running for the gold; only thing that's on our mind is the goal. Patriotism makes us want to live for America, not just in America.

I can just imagine what pride over flowed from the hearts of all those women when they heard that the 19th Amendment was passed. Some of these women had been fighting most of their lives for this moment. Some of them had to face discrimination and mockery to achieve their goal.

Our nation would not have survived all the trials if it had not been for the patriotism of the people. From the Battle of Saratoga to the Battle of Gettysburg during the Civil War to the terrorist attack on Sept. 11, 2001, Americans have been faithful and patriotic. When we look up to Old Glory, we get that feeling that compels us to sing and shout for the flag that symbolizes our freedom and liberty.

You ask the question, what does patriotism mean to me? It means celebrating the 4th of July. It means helping the poor in our country. It means fighting for our country even if it requires sacrifice. It means the love and devotion to one's country.

-Oksana V.

junisha 2 / 3  
Oct 1, 2013   #2
oksanavy7
I know not what course others may take, but as for me, give me liberty or give me death!"
I don't know, what course may take, but as for me, give me liberty or give me death.[/i]

Patriotism makes us want to live for America, not just in America.
Patriotism makes us to live for our country,not only in the country. [i]
Pahan 1 / 1824  
Oct 2, 2013   #3
they fought because of their patriotism

they fought in the name of patriotism.

It drives us like the Olympic athlete running for the gold; only thing that's on our mind is the goal.

.... the second part is not getting connected with the first part.
Also, you spoke about soldiers and their patriotic feelings. So, you could have shown that the same feeling extends to all countrymen in whatever respective field they represent. And then you could have talked about the Olympic gold medalist.
OP oksanavy7 1 / 6  
Oct 22, 2013   #4
Also, you spoke about soldiers and their patriotic feelings. So, you could have shown that the same feeling extends to all countrymen in whatever respective field they represent.

the audience will be veterans, i think it probably should stay on the topic of war veterans but thanks for the feedback


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