A street market in summer in a hot climate. Write a short descriptive paragraph.

A street market is always a bustling spot during the hot summers. Here people sell fresh produce, flowers, desserts, crafts, clothing, snacks and even accessories. The stalls are randomly sequenced at both sides, leaving a narrow lane now squeezed with people. At the grocery stalls, vegetables and fruits look superbly fresh in their vibrant colours. The tangy aroma of sweet peaches permeates the air, truly refreshing. Almost every accessories stall could be found selling embroidered summer hats and sunglasses which are now bang on trend. All the vendors in the market serve their customer enthusiastically. Their smiles never go weary and they advertise their items with the sweetest approach. As for the customers, they drown the whole market with chatters and endless laughter, sometimes even intensify the chaotic state through the noise of bargain. Parents grip their children tightly in hand, fearing to have them lost among the boundless crowd of men. Vagabonds and beggars settle at the edgemost corner, await for the kind hearted men to be the next donor.The biggest attraction of the street market is nothing more famous than all the street food and delicacies. Those hot and fluffy pancakes dripped in corn maple syrup together with a glass of iced lemonade, muffins in various flavours and decorations, the mustard cony dogs, the classic chocolate ice- cream. They are just perfect summer treats! Such is the street market. Indeed a wonderful sight in this amazing summer.

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I think that the paragraph is too straightforward. It is truly descriptive, in a mechanical way. You need to use a little creativity when writing the information.These descriptive statements often work better when the writer, if allowed by the teacher, uses a first person approach to the statement. The best way to write the short descriptive paragraph is always to do it by referring to your personal experience as a visitor at the street market. That gives an insider look to the market, a more engaging description of the activities, and simply an overall interactive experience rather than just a simple description as you have presented in this version. The essay you have right now is one dimensional. You need to use a more active voice in the presentation and that, is best served using first person pronouns. Take the reader along on the journey through the street market. You can describe the market, but that won't be as descriptive as an interactive description.