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THE STUDY OF CHARACTER AND THEIR DEVELOPMENT OR THE STUDY OF LANGUAGE DEVELOPMENT


joshuanderitu01 2 / 42  
Jul 7, 2012   #1
please help me with your support and to correct myself if i am wrong in this eassy i am having alot of hard time feeling

that my eassy might be having some mistakes in it.

According to this research that is theological; he says it proves that people's characters, character development and their definition of character is enabled by God and this is because by every character identified by name, there is a reason for God to make a certain judgment, to define his own character within us when it is faithfully and without doubt known by its name. This is proven with very small detail in mind that there is a reason why people behave the way they do.

I WILL PUNISH THEM: (people's characters)
It would be an ignorant thing if God said he would punish people for nothing. God is good and he doesn't punish people for nothing. God's people have good characters and the bible recognizes them by name Jerusalem, Israel and Judah. It would be hard to have these characters if God didn't develop them. God is not ignorant when he says that he will punish them, but by him holding himself back for a long time, the characters men develop are destroyed and are not good enough without God's consideration and help to carefully go through the full process of being called appropriate or faithful characters.

This means things are happening and we are not finding out how to stop them within us while God has a way to stop them when we think of what is right for us to do for a solution.

Which proves that the characters we make or even the development of characters we make is due to the silence that does not bring any perfection of the faithful God within us.

I WILL RESTORE THEM AND COMFORT THEM: (people's movements)
If 'I will punish them' (people's characters) was not true then ' I will restore them and comfort them' (people's movements) would not be true as well because if this silence that does not bring any perfection of the faithful God within us was not there "I will restore them and comfort them" (peoples movements)would not be true.

Then this means that step 2 of character development means things are getting better and clear about how they are happening and we are getting a little much more control in solving and finding a solution.

I AM THE HIGH AND HOLY GOD: (faithful God within us and his definition)
This proves that in this stage of character development there is no silence hindering perfection of the faithful God within us and this means. Things are okay and better as well as clear about how they are happening, and we got better and the control in solving and finding the solution.

artin 7 / 17  
Jul 7, 2012   #2
Hi Joshua,

1)I think sentences are too long.Make it shorter therefore reader feel relax.(especially first paragraph)
2)If 'I will punish them' (people's characters) was not true then ==> change to were
3)I think you can make sentences a bit simpler.

Finally,some gramatical problems exist.I recommend to work on tenses and "IF CLAUSES".
Thx
OP joshuanderitu01 2 / 42  
Jul 7, 2012   #3
Thank you so much i'll work on it this time thank you
OP joshuanderitu01 2 / 42  
Jul 11, 2012   #4
can i write it again you check for me?
artin 7 / 17  
Jul 11, 2012   #5
Sure your welcome.I`ll be glad if I can help you.
OP joshuanderitu01 2 / 42  
Jul 12, 2012   #6
i need help checking on my essay please check it for me now to let me know if there are
some developments from the previous one .i will appreciate
OP joshuanderitu01 2 / 42  
Jul 13, 2012   #7
artin
i need help checking on my essay please check it for me now to let me know if there are
some developments from the previous one .i will appreciate
artin 7 / 17  
Jul 16, 2012   #8
Hi joshua,sorry for delay because I was on vacation & no internet connection.
However,
"God's people have good characters " what does it mean?
"This means, things are happening" use punctuation
"Which proves that the characters we make ,or even the development of characters we make is due to the silence that does not bring any perfection of the faithful God within us ." meaning is not clear.

"If, (no comma ) "I will punish them" (people's characters) was (were ) not true then"

At all your improvment is considerable.
Good Luck
OP joshuanderitu01 2 / 42  
Jul 16, 2012   #9
"God's people have good characters"

This is about the research and describing it, is through alot of investigation that God's people have good
characters and so, it mensions them without clauses because it's a description of research.thank you artin,i appreciate
your feed back.
"Which proves that the characters we make ,or even the development of characters we make is due to the silence that does not bring any perfection of the faithful God within us." meaning is not clear.

This means while things happen everyday in life,there is a hindrance in the perfection of people to be just in their characters, to perfect what

should be corrected in life, when the truth needs for justice and the hindrance of it to be removed ,so that perfection can be seen in life for everyone.


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