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IELTS "a subject that you haven't opportunity to study" study religion more deep



Eva Novita Sari 47 / 67  
Apr 6, 2014   #1
Question:
If you could study a subject that you have never had the opportunity to study, what would you choose? Explain your choice, using specific reasons and details.

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Answer:
Subject is area of knowledge studied in schools or boarders. If I would have opportunity to study a subject, I do not know yet. I think that I would choose to study religion more deep. I am very like about religion. I ever studied about it until bajuri book. However, I am interested to study more high again.

I think it is very interesting to know knowledge about religion from bajuri, jannah, and om. It is book that give many knowledges about Islam law until root it. For example, it explains about married law. I think that every persons interested about it because each persons has wanted for getting married. However, some people have not many knowledges about responsibility establishing household.

Another important for studying religion can know about cause of several matters that forbidden by Islam law such why we forbidden to eat pig and dog. I think that all forbidden there is because of it. That is all explained in om book. Hence, I am very curious about many becauses from forbidden. I want to know about it.

In conclusion, I think that if time gave me self realization, it makes me to get more opportunities for reaching what I want. However, time never wait us. It always rotates on its axis. It makes us to forward because the world increasingly sophisticated. Therefore, we should study many skills that can compete with abroad.

teefa 2 / 2  
Apr 6, 2014   #2
I am very like about religion !!
i don't get it.

I am interested to study (in studying) more high again
dumi 1 / 6793  
Apr 7, 2014   #3
Subject is area of knowledge studied in schools or boarders.

This is not a strong hook. It fails to deliver a clear idea :( Better re-do the hook :)

If I would have opportunity to study a subject, I do not know yet.

This sentence is incomplete :( if you have the opportunity to study a subject, what would you do? You need to combine that answer here.
I think it is very interesting to knowacquire knowledge about religion from bajuri, jannah, and om.

It is book that give many knowledges about Islam law until root it.

"knowledge" is a singular noun and there is no word "knowledges"
Pahan 1 / 1824  
Apr 7, 2014   #4
I think that every personsperson is interested about it because each personsperson wants to gethas wanted for getting married. However, some people have not many knowledgesmuch knowledgeabout married responsibilitiesresponsibility establishing household.

You need to pay a great attention to your grammar;

every person/ each person/ all persons

much knowledge
ernhy 17 / 28  
Apr 8, 2014   #5
However, I aminterested to study more high again.

interested or interesting??

I think that if time gave me self realization

gave or give???
eddies [Contributor] 25 / 1170  
Apr 10, 2014   #6
You should utilize the grammar and spell check features of Microsoft Word to correct as many spelling and grammar problems as possible before submitting your essays. You will find this under the Tools menu of Microsoft Word. If something in your document is underlined in red or green, be sure to check the spelling and grammar suggestions prior to submission. Also proofread your essay yourself to locate correctly spelled but misused words.


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