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'substantial growth in both Petrol and Oil, and Coal'; Comparison of four different types of fuels



nana77 2 / 2  
May 5, 2016   #1
This is TASK 1 essay from IELTS. (Words count are 165)

The graph shows the percentage of four different types of fuels in use between the years 1800 and 2000.
Summarize the information by describing the main features of the graph and making comparisons where appropriate.

This line chart illustrates both history and forecast of energy consumption in the USA between 1980 to 2030. Overall, Petrol and Oil, and Coal will be predicted to increase in 2030, while others might be stable.

Looking first at history parts, Petrol and Oil was the largest energy consumption which was about 35 quadrillion units in 1980, whereas Nuclear, Solar/ Wind and Hydropower were only about 3 quadrillion units. After that, Petrol and Oil, and Coal have been dramatically leapt for over the past two decades, which were approximately 42 and 26 quadrillion units respectively.

Turning to the predictions, from 2020 to 2030, there will be substantial growth in both Petrol and Oil, and Coal. As for Petrol and Oil, it will be reached at about 47 quadrillion units. On the other hand, Nuclear and Solar/ Wind will slightly go up in 2030 about 9 and 7 quadrillion units respectively. As regard Natural Gas and Hydropower, they are anticipated to slightly go down in 2030.


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Maya29 14 / 11  
May 5, 2016   #2
Hi Nana,
It is nice to read your writing. Please let me give some suggestions to you.

It seems that your question and chart don't match to your essay. Both of them tell about energy consumption between 1800 and 2000, but your essay also informs about the predictions in 2030. Please double check your task first before write an essay. Task response holds about 25% of overall points in writing. That's why I can only give you advices in the grammar for this essay.

both of history and forecastThe record and prediction of the energy consumption usage in the USA between 1980 to 2030.

Looking first at history partsto the past use , Petrol and Oil was

After that, Petrol and Oil, and Coal havehad been dramatically

I find that you stated to many numbers of the data. Actually, you don't need to do that. Try to find more interesting data in your graph then describe it precisely.

I hope my suggestion are useful for you. Keep writing..:)


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