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IELTS;There is no success without studying our past, so studying History is important


joythblessy 86 / 272 15  
Dec 31, 2012   #1
Is it important to study History?

History is the systemic study of the past. Some people hold the opinion that learning about the past is useless. However, I believe that it is important to know about the past mainly because it binds today and tomorrow.

History is a great store of information. People want to know much clearer about their society's establishment and development process is natural. History includes the wisdom and the valuable experience, which helps people today. Consequently, it enables people to avoid repeating mistakes of the past. For instance, when people learn more about the factors, which leads to a riot in the past, make today's, people more vigilant to avoid it in the future. In other words, history is an experience, which you do not need to practice it and it, helps the people to compare between good and bad.

Furthermore, people used tell that 'past is past' or 'history never repeats itself. Yet, there is much in history, which is relevant to our modern life. Studying other historical periods gives insights into different ways of life. As a result, they will be able to compare those societies with our own. Hence, they will be more aware of the advancements in the current society. I short, histories enlighten us to analyze how and why we have changed. People will be conscious about the contributions of their forefathers' and respect them more. Besides, it broadens our wisdom and outlook.

To sum up, there is no successful present without lessons from the past and no future without learning how to live with our past. Since history builds today, the study of history is much significant even in this advanced technological age. This doesn't mean that we are living in the past.

falks405 4 / 9 1  
Dec 31, 2012   #2
I think it a very nice work) but you should avoid repetitions check that web site thesaurus.com
try to ritу down the words that you use more than twice and then find some sinonyms
for example - people, folk, humanity, society...
regards
Leo
duquevan 5 / 13 2  
Dec 31, 2012   #3
Take care with the use of connectors, using them after every single idea makes pauses in the reading. I would reccomend you to write more naturally and use connectors only at the begginning of paragraphs.
colin 23 / 48 15  
Dec 31, 2012   #4
Furthermore, people used tell that 'past is past' or 'history never repeats itself.
==>>Furthermore, people usually concern that history is not going to be repeat itself.

To sum up, there is no successful present without lessons from the past and no future without learning how to live with our past.
==>>In conclusion, current success comes from learning from history.

It is fine. Keep on writing.
OP joythblessy 86 / 272 15  
Jan 1, 2013   #5
hai colin...

Happy new year..

Thanks for correction

Tessy
dumi 1 / 6,928 1592  
Jan 2, 2013   #6
History is the systemic study of the past.

It's well written, but I have a problem with that as an idea. Is History a study? I guess it the collection of events that happened in the past. :)

However, I believe that it is important to know about the past mainly because it binds today and tomorrow.

... it provides very meaningful insights for a better today and tomorrow.

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For instance, when people learn more about the factorsreasons

or you can say "factors contributing to ..."

Very impressive style of writing
OP joythblessy 86 / 272 15  
Jan 2, 2013   #7
Hai dumi...

Thanks a lot..

History is a collection of past events...
We are studing it as a subject in school. It becomes as increasingly complicted subject in higher classes..wars. Year of wars, emporers and so on.really i dont like studying history...):

So...):
I feel it as a systemic study.

Thanks for sharing your ideas and support..
Tessy


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