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Sumarry TEDx How we will find life on other planet



Bams17 28 / 38  
Nov 21, 2016   #1
How we will find life on other planet

Aomawa shields is astronomer from University of Washington. On TEDx 2014, she was as a speaker. She said that there was water in our earth therefore there was life in our planet. Every places containing water can be predicted that there was life in that place. Recently, the result of Universe research shows that the materials in others planets have different kinds. Take it sample Venus, this planet has temperature surface 600 degrees Fahrenheit which was can melt a metal. On the other word, the place can be living should has atmosphere because it is the crucial items as balancing climate. Next speaker claim that characteristic of planet which is can be lived at least quite similar as earth. Another example was Glaces 7667 C planet 23 light way from earth, in this planet detected there was water on the surface. In the end, she believe that there was another one universe which is can be lived.

nda18 46 / 60  
Nov 21, 2016   #2
hi @Bams17, these are my thought towards your summary

firstly, try to make summary in third person point of view.
Aomawa shields is astronomer from...
[Aomawa Shields, the speaker on TED 2014, is an astronomer from University of Washington.]
[it would be better if you use compound or complex sentence ]


She said that there was water in ...
[ she informed that the life occurred on the earth because of water existence. So that, we will find a life everywhere water exist. ]

Take it sample Venus, this planet has...
[ Taking Venus as example, this planet surface temperature is around 600 degrees Fahrenheit which is can melt a metal ]
[ please use simple present tense to write general fact ]


... the place can be livinglived should hashave atmosphere (...) crucial items as balancingto balance the climate.

Next, speaker claimed that characteristic of ...
... Glaces 7667 C a planet 23 light way ...

thank you, keep writing and break a leg


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