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Summarize article : Extremely Dangerous' Hurricane Nicole to Pummel Bermuda



andika08 81 / 73  
Oct 13, 2016   #1
Hurricane nicole make the effect for the british teritory of bermuda over the night and potential to damage small island in the northern atlantic ocean.

Bermuda and authorities on Wednesday affected from the hurricane in the next day. Rain all day in school and government offices are warn for people to stay inside. The solid infrastructure that accustomed about the storms make many people be safety since the rain and wind come over quickly.

In other place among historical buildings in mangrove bay called a popular spot for water sport that many tourist come to booked at Wednesday night. They using a largely boarded as their transport. Hotels, meanwhile, reported bookings are full of people that effect makes them no choice to stay.

In the next day, The hurricane was attacked the surfers in south island of Bermuda including Puerto Rico, where government said they were find the body of a surfer who pass away on Tuesday. He was identified as 37-year-old Gabriel Pantoja.

justivy03 - / 2265  
Oct 18, 2016   #2
Hi Andika, here's my take on your essay;

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- and potential to damaged a small island

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There you have it Andika, as you can see, there is quiet a lot of corrections to be done in your essay and I hope you follow through with the suggested enhancements, I left the last paragraph so you will be able to practice editing the essay yourself, this will be a good practice that you can also do to other articles here on EF, believe me, it will help you develop your writing skills.


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