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Summarize article : Why Yellow Birds Mysteriously Turn Red


andika08 81 / 80 16  
Nov 11, 2016   #1
No one will realize why a North America woodpecker's feathers are changing its color from yellow to red. However, there were some ornithologists have noticed some bird's yellow feathers have strangely turned red. They thought the birds have bred with another member, such as the red northern birds which is lives in the West, but then they figured out that the red birds are thousands of miles away from these eastern North America woodpeckers.

According to new research published in The Auk, the observation has given a result that 'you are what you eat' has proven unexpected true. The answer why it turns out to be red, because of its diet. The birds is eating red berries which can turn their feathers having a dark deep red color. The changing color into yellow, orange, or red hues is common in bird's feathers which actually come from the food they eat that produce some pigments.
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Nov 11, 2016   #2
Andika, this is an acceptable summary at this point. I believe that you could have created an almost perfect summary if you had omitted the first sentence in this summary statement. Sticking to the opening from the point where you speak of the Orinthologists would have immediately called the attention of the reader to the information offered within the original article. The first sentence, which was meant to act as the hook did not work very well because there was no proper set up for the statement sentence. Before that topic sentence was placed, you should have placed a simple narrative sentence that would have implied that people were wondering about why the bird's feathers were changing color in the first place. A general observation of sorts would have sufficed prior to the presentation of the information that people could not figure out why that was happening. By the way, next time, kindly post a link to the original article for our reference during the review of your essay. Thanks.
yurikeyuri 43 / 61 2  
Nov 14, 2016   #3
Hello Andika, let me give you my correction for you

... bird's yellow feathers which have strangely turned red.

... northern birds which isareliveslive in the West

The birds isare eating red berries ...

thank you for your attention.


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