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IELTS Summary Task American Bike Project where to Sleep


Dioba 68 / 104 7  
Sep 28, 2016   #1
Tyler Metcalfe, as a National Geographic Travel photographer, quit his job and sold off his properties to do a journey of cross-country cycling. It is likely that a touring cyclist will sleep in a different place of their journey. The major problem from travelers using bicycle is finding place to sleep. He argued that finding a place to sleep often result in some of the most frustrating, exciting, and even scary moments of a trip. Furthermore, he said that the best option for finding a good place to sleep on a bike tour is campsites. Travelers can choose a number of options to reserve tent campsites with relatively cheap cost. Campsites also usually offer fire pits, running water, restrooms, and usually are located near park visitor centers. Second, Hotels and motels are become other option. Stay in a hotel it offers some sort amenities such as laundry services, showers and a soft bed. Third, hostels also provide options for cyclists looking to find comfortable and cheap. The benefits of hostels are lower costs but almost same facilities like hotels

eve01 24 / 40 5  
Sep 28, 2016   #2
hi dioba ^.^
i would like to note you some advises

>> it is better to write by using "conjunctions" such as (and, while, although, but, however etc.. but macth with sentence you write)

And It is likely that a touring cyclist ...
Meanwhile, The major problem from travelers (...) place to sleep but
on the other side . Travelers can choose a number ...
And Campsites also usually ...

The benefits of hostels are lower costs (...) but the facilities are offeredalmost the same like hotels

>>>(comparative has to use than = er .... than...)

keep writing
justivy03 - / 2,367 607  
Sep 28, 2016   #3
Hi Dioba, below are a few suggestions to further enhance your essay.

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- Campsites also usually offer fire pits,
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- and cheap accommodation .

There you have it Dioba, I hope the above remarks and modifications are helpful and for future writing purposes, mind the form of words that you associate in the sentences, make sure that they are the words that you need in order to convey the message to your readers.


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