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TED Summary - How to Build Good Life



Ucha MSN 17 / 22  
Nov 10, 2016   #1
Tai Lopes gave a lecture about why people are required to read a book a day. At the beginning of his speech, he described how to get a good life such as health, happiness, and love. In fact, everybody wants something, but not all of them get it.

Next, he presented three major factors that may influence a good life. Those are tutor, media, and book. Mentors have an important position as a role model for their followers. They may help people to experience their work. The Second is media which has treated us. It tries to show us many things to be learned. And the last is book. Book is modern system in learning that provided us many information and education.

Lopes suggested collecting book approximately 150 titles. We need to deem those books as friend so we can enjoy it. He also opined that there is no specific rule on how to read it. How quickly we read, how many pages, and how many days are not required, but it is better to read one book a week. It is noticeable that everybody wants a good life, but not everybody is willing to read to get it.

eve01 24 / 21  
Nov 10, 2016   #2
hi ucha
here is my notes for you

I like your article anyway because I've ever seen this video, and I love it. I would concern on third paragraph, I think you are missing the contents, you only explained 'read'. but you forgot two others kinds of them, about tutor and media. those related with it also. you can describe like you tell about the functions of reading anymore.

... read one book a week.It is noticeable that everybody wants a good life, but not everybody is willing to read to get it.---> your statement jumps after u wrote "How quickly we read, how many pages, and how many days are not required, but it is better to read one book a week." I mean you need more detail why this happens ?before come to the 'good life' . The point is you didn't put the reasons (why) but directly the negative result. Perhaps you can convey your writing with cause-effect, it would be appropriate.

hope it helps :)


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