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TED Summary : How to control someone else's arm with your brain - by Greg Gate


molly16 9 / 10  
Aug 15, 2016   #1
Electrophysiology as the Neuro-Revolution is faced apparently in the cutting-aged world. The brain as the most vital organ has never been acquainted as well in the early aged in school. The main reason for this is about the high expenditure for this instrument such as money and time. People who want to have broaden horizon about the brain should dedicate their time and be focus to explore the matter. Greg Gage who is the founder of a company called Backyard Brains with Tim Marzullo, make DIY neuroscience equipment that is simple, affordable enough and could be learned by an amateur or a high school student, so they may be thinking about possibly becoming a brain scientist. In TED's live performance, he demonstrated the equipment and showed for all audience how the somebody's brain, that have about 80 billion neurons inside transferred an electrical and chemical messages back and forth and could control someone else's arm with her brain. The demonstration illustrates that it is a simple way to conduct another person with our brain.
Rinnegan45 - / 39 5  
Aug 15, 2016   #2
'Sup there, fella!

I've got some corrections here for you. don't keep it personal 'kay.

1. Electrophysiology as the Neuro-Revolution is faced apparently in the cutting-aged world. = the structure is swapped i think and it should be "is apparently faced with" and the use of "the cutting-age world" is a bit off the mark. i suggest you to change it to be "this sophisticated era"

2. People who want to have broaden horizon about the brain ...
3. Greg Gage who is the founder of a company ...
4. so they may be thinking about possibly the possibility of becoming a brain scientist.
5. he demonstrated the equipment and showed for all audience how the somebody's one's brain, that have about 80 billion neurons inside, transferred an electrical and chemical messages back and forth;and could control someone else's arm with her brain.

6. ... that it is a simple way to conduct with another person with our brain.

thanks


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