Summary of TED fusion is energy's future (Steve Cowley)

One of the crucial problem nowadays is Energy crisis and greenhouse effect. Energy in the moment is dominated by non-renewable energy resource such as coal, oil, gas etc and all those three sources are even not eco-friendly. Hence, according to Steve Cowley,United Kingdom Physicist,we have to pay attention about perfect energy. It is indicated by several conditions namely; Neither take much space nor any carbon emission, has a virtually inexhaustible supply, safe, and no any long-term radio active ray will be released to the atmosphere. And the predominantly solution is Fusion. it had initially been known since 1920 when S. A. Stanley Eddington and the British Association of Science conjectured that's why the sun shines and it also the reason why starts become illuminated. Reaction of fusion between two hydrogen (Deuterium + Tritium ) isotope will release Neutron and Helium together with the equal energy 17.6 MeV. Deuterium is the heavy Hydrogen isotope which can be supplied by sea water and Tritium is super heavy hydrogen can be released by reaction between Litium and neutron. The statistic data shown that fusion can also be considered to long-term energy resources it is conserve until one million years of world energy supply. Hence, it firmly suggests that Fusion is the effective way to solve that decisive problem.

Hi Ifan, as I go along in reviewing your summary, what I like about it is its logical order, you made sure that your summary is not written only upon your understanding but you made sure that they are in the right order. Not only that, you have the right information, crucial ones that justify the TED Fusion of future energy, having all the information means you understood the talk and you learned from it.

However, I would suggest that in your future writing and revision, avoid using the word, "and", in the beginning of your sentences. The word "and" is use to connect or merge two phrases in order to complete an idea. Therefore, it is not advisable to use it in the starting your essay.

Overall, it is a well written summary with all the necessary information in their properly respected sequence and I hope to review more of your essay soon.

Hello @ifan21, I got some advice for your writing.

Here my suggestion:

1. One of the crucial problems nowadays is E nergy crisis and greenhouse effect.

2. ... by non-renewable energy resources such as coal, oil, gas etc ...

3. Hence, according to Steve Cowley, the United Kingdom Physicist, we have to pay ...

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pay attention in plural/singular issue

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confusing sentence
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Andhence, the predominantly solution is Fusion.

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... can be supplied by sea water andwhile Tritium that is super heavy hydrogen ...

... can also be considered to be long-term energy resources it iswhich conserveS until one million ...
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concern about sentence stucture

hi... ifan21
let me try to give you some corrections



your sentence above enables readers to misunderstand the meaning, please pay more attention on your structure (conjunction subject + verb, subject + verb)

hope this helps,
thanks,

hi friend .a have some suggestions

One of the crucial problems. N owadays ,

all the necessary information shuld be
all the information necessaries or all informations of necessary

,we have to pay attention about energy perfectly

that's should be that is
avoid to use that's ,it can make worse in in your essay and it can decrease in your value of yours

i hope ,it can help you

Hi Ifan21,

I have few notes for you.

* One of the crucial environmental {to make it clearly} problems nowadays isE nergy {energy } crisis and greenhouse effect

* Energy in the moment is dominated by non-renewable ...

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