In 1986, the world's worst nuclear accident was happened and released nuclear radiation 400 times as much as radiation the bomb dropped by The United States in Hiroshima. The accident was occurred in Chernobyl. Nowadays, Chernobyl is more popular as a dead city because leak of nuclear reactor several years ago. After the accident, the environment particularly Chernobyl's soil, water and air are categorized as the highest contaminated on our hemisphere. Holly Morris, as a TED speaker, was tried to filming the accident of Chernobyl. She found strange facts about the area that vast of people were evacuated at the time of the accident. But at the moment, she saw smoke coming from a farmhouse. Moreover, several citizens still stay and living inside the dangerous environment and they called them self as self-settlers. Almost of them are women and they lives in dangerous area. For the victim of this tragedy suffered higher levels of anxiety and depression all lives. But for self-settlers, their spirit and existence of them keep their spirit for their life.
Dear Dioba, here some advice for your writing and feel free to correct me too!
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Regards
Hi Dioba, here's another one from my end.
- was happened and released nuclear radiation 400 times
- as much asmore radiation than
- The accident was occurred in Chernobyl.
- city because of the leak of the nuclear reactor ...
- air arewas categorized as the ...
- one in our hemisphere.
- Holly Morris, as a TED speaker, was tried to filming the accident
- of the Chernobyl.
- She found strange facts about the area thatwhere a vast of people
- Almost all of them are women and
- theythere lives in dangerous areaare in danger .
- For the victim of this tragedy, they suffered higher levels
- depression all their lives. But, however, for self-settlers, their spirit and existence of them keep their spirits alivefor their life .
There you have it Dioba, I hope the above remarks are helpful to your revision.
For future writing reference, mind the minor details on your sentences, remember, the sentences makes up the idea of the entire essay so you have to be very cautious.I wish to review your final essay soon.
Hi mr Dio, these are my thought towards your summary
1. it would be better if you write some opening sentences.
2. ... nuclear accident was happened and released
The accident was occurred in Chernobyl
Holly Morris, as a TED speaker, was tried to filming
[ Watch your active and passive voice sentence]
3. Nowadays, Chernobyl is more popular as a dead city
[ it would be better if you use 'known as a dead city' ]
the main problem of your is when you use active or passive voice
i hope it helps , keep writing and goodluck
