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Summary TED - Mia Nacamulli; Learning more than one language

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Nov 16, 2016   #1
Mia Nacamulli - The benefits of a bilingual brain

Learning more than one language has many advantages for people especially for children. This is because the brain will work well if people force themselves to understand another language which is not their first language. Therefore, all of hemispheres of brain have to work together to produce different accent and pronunciation from the other language. In addition, children will be easier to learn new language than elderly. In conclusion, having bilingual does not make our brain smart, yet it makes us healthier, complex, and actively engaged.

source: ed.ted.com/lessons/how-speaking-multiple-languages-benefits-the-brain-mia-nacamulli#watch

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Nov 16, 2016   #2
Bung, the summary that you wrote is too rushed and does not inform the reader of the necessary parts of the video. The most important parts being the description of the 3 types of bilingual brains. Since you did not indicate that in your report, you were unable to properly assess the video material for information and importance. While the rest of your information was based on the video report, there was no instance where you actually informed the reader properly regarding the main topic being discussed in the video. Therefore, your essay is wanting in information and clarity. As far as task achievement goes, you only partially fulfilled the needs of the essay due to your failure to indicate the key points of discussion in the essay. Sadly, that may have an effect on the final score that you could possibly get. Just remember, the key discussions must always be represented in the essay. So do your best to identify and note its importance during the listening segment of the test.

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