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Summary TED - nine life lessons from rock climbing


Abrahamlincoln 54 / 56  
Nov 10, 2016   #1
Matthew Childs is a professional climber, has been climbing two dozens of years. Based on his experience, he reveals there are 9 values which could be implemented in our life. 1) Fear is a mistake. People who travel on the mountain are required to ensure every single step they pass is completed and help them to reach the finish line. If we are afraid or doubt to take a step, it means finished, we will fall into the ravine and disappear. Focusing on your little step will help you to attain your goal and target. 2) Design your comfortable place to take a nap. It cannot be disputed that life is unfair. Most people become disappointed and hopeless, they are not ready to confront difficulties and be ready in their delicate situation. Therefore, the ability to find the positive side of your life is an essential skill which should be developed. Its aim is to have a positive mind in every condition

mem77 62 / 98 6  
Nov 10, 2016   #2
Dear Lincoln, here some advice for your writing and feel free to correct me too!

Based on his experiences, he reveals there ...

... every single step that they pass is completed ...

Most of people become (...) ready to confront the difficulties and being ready in their ...

Regards
ryan31 65 / 96 15  
Nov 10, 2016   #3
hello lincoln
I have some suggestions for you
hope it works

1. I think you should put the source in the end of this summary
2. I prefer to choose words than number for opening sentences
3. If the number below twenty, you can put it into a word


... a professional climber, he has been climbing two dozens rocks of years.

... he reveals there are 9nine values which ...

1)firstly , Fear is a mistake.
... to take a step, it means finished, we will fall into ...

Focusing on your little steps , it will be help you to attain your goal and target .

2)Secondly , design your ...

Most people becomeS disappointed and hopeless,(...) confront with<<< collocation
the difficulties and be ready in their delicateharsh situation.
Itsit is aim is to have a ...

thanks
eve01 24 / 40 5  
Nov 10, 2016   #4
hi lincoln here is my notes for your summary

>>use conjunction between sentence to help reader easy to understand what you have written.

..., he revealsED there are 9 values ...
1)Firstly,(try to put a word than number) Fear is a mistake.

2)Secondly , Design your ...
... life is unfair .since Most people (...) hopeless,and they are not ready ...
Meanwhile, Its aim is to have a ...
RAY93 35 / 186 136  
Nov 11, 2016   #5
... professional climber WHO has been climbing ...
... he reveals THAT there are 9 values...
1) Fear is a mistake. (...) on the mountain are required to ensure every (...) completed and help [HELP REFERS TO? WHO HELP THEM? them to reach ...
... it means finished , we will fall into ...
2)[NEED TO LEARN ABOUT HOW TO ARRANGE MANYIDEAS WITH REGARD TO ITS COHERENCE, SO DO NOT PUT NUMBERS HERE. INDEED YOU SHOULD USE COHESIVE DEVICE/TRANSITION] Design your comfortable ...

It cannot be disputed that life is unfair. Most people ...[NEED TO EXPLAIN WHAT THE CORRELATION OF THIS WITH 'TAKING A NAP']Therefore, the ability to ...

UNCLEAR POSITION OF THE WRITER, THE FIRST VIEW OR THE THIRD?


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