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IELTS summary task Papua New Guinea Hides Some of the Most Dangerous Volcanoes on Earth



Dioba 68 / 97  
Nov 15, 2016   #1
Dakatua, Pago, Billy Mitchell were volcanoes in Papua New Guinea which produced the biggest eruptions in the past and stood at VEI 5. Not only both of them, but also some volcanoes such as Rabaul, Tavui, Ulawun, Lolobau, Lamington, Karkar, Manam and Long Island which produce the second largest of eruptions and reached by VEI 4 in few millennia ago. For information, VEI is Volcanic Explosivity Index and the function of VEI is measuring the size of an eruption. It means that Papua New Guinea hides several of the most dangerous volcanoes on our planet. That's why inhabitants in there should be reminders about the most hazardous threats and the worse possibility if one of the volcanoes in there is eruption. Not only for the citizens in there, but also this warning for people in the world which is the chance of massive eruption that could be have a worldwide impact.

source: wired

Holt  Educational Consultant - / 15369  
Nov 15, 2016   #2
Dioba, will you consider adding some information to this essay for its informative improvement? While the summary is sufficient, the only way to prove your claims about the most dangerous volcanoes existing in Papua New Guinea is to also provide information about the immediate effects of the explosion. Just mentioning the height and range of the explosions would further improve the content of your summary. You should have done that because you made mention of the Volcanic Explosivity Index which is tasked to measure the eruptions. What was the use of mentioning that index when you did not mention the measurements of the eruptions when you listed the volcanoes in the country? Make sure that when you write your summaries, that you double check your information to match all of the important data included. In this case, the measurements should have accompanied the index.
nda18 46 / 60  
Nov 15, 2016   #3
hi dio, these are my thought towards your summary

firstly, it would be better if you add some more information here.

... and Long Island which produced the second largest of eruptions and (the rate) reached by...

For (addition) information, VEI is...

That'sThat is why Papua's inhabitants in there should be remindersreminded about the most hazardous threats and the worse possibility if one of the those volcanoes in thereis eruptions .

Not only for the local citizens in there , but also this becomea warning for people in thearound the world which is ...

thankyou and good luck
Hujjatul19 45 / 64  
Nov 15, 2016   #4
Hi Dioba, here is some suggestions for you

... in Papua New Guinea which producedproduces (since it is a fact, you need to present it in simple present time tense) the biggest eruptions in ...

It meansbased on what is presented above, we may conclude that Papua New Guinea hides several of the ...
... there should be reminderswary regarding this issue as it is about the most hazardous...

Best Regards


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