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SUMMARY ARTICLE : ARE YOU SURE 2016 IS THE BLEAK HISTORY EVER?



dinartika19 37 / 66  
Aug 10, 2016   #1
Hello, this is my new thread. It is a summary article from History Today article. The original article has a title "Is 2016 The Worst Year in History" by Paul Lay. I added the link in the last paragraph if you prefer to see it. And I hope you could give me a feedback later after you read my summary. Thanks!

So many people said that 2016 is the worst year in history. Let's talk about global issues like increasing terrorism in Europe, the effect of Brexit, failed armies coup in Turkey,the Zika spread over the world, poverty and war in Syria and Iraq.

The research by Paul Lay gave other prespective. In 1347, "the Black Death" killed at least a third of the continent population (especially Asia) in the range of three years. Next, in 1942 until 1943 Wehrmacht made Holocaust winning until Suviet Nation. Regardless of the attempt of ISIS,what happens now is far away than a great level of murder ever took place.

If I refered Paul Lay about the worst year, then it would possibly be 1914. An European who wanted to bring peace and wealth began to solve their problems. The immeasurable conflict that pursued to The Russian Revolution, Nazy, atomic bomb, and enlightened chaos in Middle East. Followed by the fall of Berlin Wall in the 1989, the world became more steady.

When we said that 2016 is the most unpleasant, depends on the fact of history, are you sure about it?

Link : historytoday/paul-lay/2016-worst-year-history#sthash.a4FE8nXw.dpuf

justivy03 - / 2265  
Aug 10, 2016   #2
Hi Atikah, WELCOME to the Essay Forum Team, I hope you find this website helpful and rather useful to your writing projects, after this suggestions, however, you can still choose which ones you think best corresponds to the prompt, rest assured that we will be here, ready to provide you with the most accurate feedback and useful tips in order to hone your skills in this craft.

Having said that, I run through your essay, this summary is rather short, but, it definitely is of the essence of a summary, it's suppose to have just the right information about the article on review and it should have the lessons you can grip out of its contents, furthermore, you made sure that the gaps, though not necessary between the paragraphs, are there to support your sentence and make more comprehensible to your readers.

However, I have a few suggestions towards the last and final sentence you have, please find this below;

- When weHaving said that 2016 is the most unpleasant year ,
- depends on the fact of history, are you sure about it?and how an individual sees it.

There you have it Atikah, I hope the above remarks are insightful and helped your revision.


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