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Do you support that the nuclear technology should be used for constructive purposes?


debby17 8 / 20 5  
Oct 20, 2016   #1
IELTS Writing Task 2..

You should spend 40 minutes on this task.

Do you support that the nuclear technology should be used for constructive purposes?

Use your own knowledge and experience and support your argument with examples and relevant evidence. Give reasons for your viewpoint.

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Nuclear Energy has been globally spoken for the past few years. Some people argue that the nuclear technology could be used for the sake of development. It can be true but I totally disagree of this idea and in this essay I will support my opinion with examples.

Primarily, nuclear accident is one of the main concern regarding the use of nuclear technology. Despite the high level of sophistication of safety system that the technology have, human and environmental aspects always get the impact when unexpected event occured. For example, chernobyl nuclear accident which was claim as the worse nuclear accident ever cause a mass sacriface of humankind and environment. Another reason is that there is some difficulties in the management of nuclear waste which takes many years to eliminate its radioactive and risk. It will also have a bad impact for the surrounding if the waste poorly manage.

In contrary, people believe that nuclear could be beneficial for advancing several medical technology. For instance, the invention of radiopharmaceutical and radiation therapy technique for the treatment of malignant tumors.

In conclusion, although there is a chance to expant nuclear technology, I believe that it is too dangerous to implement it without putting human and enviroment in line. Personally, I think that another alternative technology which is much safer should be discovered and implemented.

Cachaaaaaaaa 28 / 38 3  
Oct 20, 2016   #2
HI Debby ...

here some suggestions for your writing

first of all, it is writing task 2, so you need to write at least 250 words on it, if it less, you writing will be disqualified

accident which was claimed as the worseworst nuclear

there isare some difficulties in the management

which takes many years to eliminate (plural, it refers to some difficulties)

your body 2 is too short....

always do your best
Best wishes
Hujjatul19 45 / 70 3  
Oct 20, 2016   #3
Hi debby. What a readable writing.
However, I guess your Body 2 needs more explaination in order to support your topic sentence. It would be better to present the reason(s) why some people think that nuclear is beneficial?

... is a chance to expantd nuclear technology, I (...) human and environ ment in line. P

Best regards
andika08 81 / 80 16  
Oct 21, 2016   #4
Hello
You have a good summary
I have some corrections for you

... main concern regarding the useutilitize of nuclear technology. Despite ofthe high level of (...) that the technology havetechnology has a high level of sophistication of the system, human and environmental aspects always get the impact ...

... waste which takes many years to eliminateremoveits that radioactive and risk.

In contrary.... (You have explain the body 2 clearly and totally.)

... to implement it without putting role of human and ...
... technology which is much safer you can added the comparison with the previous energy like than before.It should be discovered and implemented for the future.


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