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The table gives information on consumer spending on different items in five different countries


lehalinh 1 / -  
Feb 1, 2021   #1

IELTS WRITING TASK 1: Consumer Spending



Topic question: The table below gives information on consumer spending on different items in five different countries in 2002.

My essay:
The table gives information about the rate of national consumer expenditure on three different categories in 2002. It can be clearly seen that, in five countries, food, drinks and tobacco is always the highest spending category, in spite of the fact that leisure and education accounted for the lowest proportion.

Especially, Turkey households spending on the category of food, drinks and tobacco made up around 33% of their total expenditure. On the other hand, 4,35% of total UK household spending went on leisure and education, and is also the highest proportion. In the category of clothing and footwear, Italy spent a higher proportion of total spending - 9% - on clothing and footwear than other countries.

In the contrary, Sweden spent only around 15% on food/drinks/tobacco and over 5% on clothing/footwear - the lowest proportion of five countries. And meanwhile, Spain spending on leisure/education constituted less than 2%.

As can be seen, food, drinks and tobacco were the most important categories in 2002.



Holt  Educational Consultant - / 10,667 3487  
Feb 2, 2021   #2
Try to not leave the trending statement for the very end. Although you can place the trending statement anywhere in the essay, it works best to improve your TA score when you add it to the summary overview.

Do not use adverbs like "especially" at the start of a sentence. This is incorrect word usage since "especially" is often used as a connecting word to help relate 2 ideas in one sentence. Once there is no previous thought presented, the adverb should not be used as a sentence starter. Additionally, the phrase is "On the contrary", not In the contrary". Do not use English phrases you are not familiar with as incorrect usage could affect your LR and GRA scores.
ndhnif 5 / 8 3  
Feb 16, 2021   #3
I think you can paraphrase better the question: The table below gives information on consumer spending on different items in five different countries in 2002. My suggestion is: "During 2002, the consumer spending habit in five different countries for different items is presented through the table below"

I'd like to highlight first the category which having significant number compare to other first, then on the following paragraphs you can provide the summary as you mention on the first paragraph. Anyway, good luck for your IELTS :)
boboiboy1a3 1 / 2  
Feb 16, 2021   #4
I think your essay did not follow the structure of a writing IELTS task 1. You should have a sentence with general idea, which start with "Overall,..."


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