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The table presents data related to subway systems located in six large cities - Ielts Task 1



Gandi 1 / -  
Oct 13, 2015   #1
The table below gives information about the underground railway systems in six cities.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

You should write at least 150 words.
You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.


It took me 26 minutes 30 seconds to write this piece.

The table presents data related to subway systems located in six large cities (London, Paris, Tokyo, Washington DC, Kyoto and Los Angeles).

Overall, one can notice that the oldest metro systems are, in most cases, the most developed ones in terms of length and therefore the highest popularity is observed there. Conversely, the youngest systems are much shorter and obviously fewer commuters use them.

The underground railway station with the richest history is definitely in London with approximately 150 years of being active. These sited in Paris and Tokyo were also opened quite a long time ago (in 1900 and 1927 respectively). The length of subway routes in these cities is considerably high ranging from 155 kilometres in Tokyo to 394 kilometres in London. In terms of the amount of commuters, Tokyo leads with an outstanding number of 1927 million passengers per year but the numbers witnessed in Paris and London are also relatively high (more than 750 million individuals per year).

In contrast, metro systems in Washington DC, Kyoto and Lost Angeles were first introduced in the last 40 years. While the capital city of the USA built relatively long routes of 126 kilometres and the number of users is higher than 100 million per year, both the Japanese city and the capital city of California observe rather small development and popularity. (223 words)


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vangiespen - / 4077  
Oct 13, 2015   #2
Francis, your time used in writing this essay is more than sufficient. However, I noticed that you did not use the remaining 4 minutes to do a quick proofread and spellcheck of your report. While the form is alright, the problem regarding content and grammar will definitely have adversely affected your final score in the actual test. Please train yourself to use any remaining time you have, no matter how short, for proofreading and spellchecking. Your paper will be all the better for it.

Par.1:
* Your opening paragraph, which is supposed to be an overview of the report is too short. You cannot have only one line of information for it. You need at least 3 sentences to make this a complete paragraph. Rather than separating the table information from your overall information, combine the two. That will make it a complete report paragraph.

The table presents data related to subway systems located in six large cities (London, Paris, Tokyo, Washington DC, Kyoto and Los Angeles).
the most developed ones in terms of length and therefore the highest popularity use is observed there.

Par. 2:
These sited situated in Paris and Tokyo .
The length of subway routes in these cities is are considerably high - Plural rules apply

Par. 3:
In contrast, metro systems in Washington DC, Kyoto and Lost Angeles
the number of users is are higher
Luthfia Dewi 7 / 11  
Oct 14, 2015   #3
Hai Gandi, I'm Luthfia. I think you are able to use your time more effective since 26 minutes are too long.

Then, "while" in the beginning of sentence means future tense. Thus, it might elaborate your first and second sentence.


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