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The table provides the information which city is more expensive: Riverdale or Cape Alicia



mohjawahir 11 / 16  
Apr 14, 2015   #1
The chart below shows the cost-of-living averages in two different cities as compared to the national cost-of-living average.

The table chart compares the cost averages of living in two different cities with the national cost average of living, and is measured in percentage. Overall, it can be seen that although the figure of housing is the most popular in Riverdale, it is the lowest level in Cape Alicia.

The highest level in this trend is housing which stood at 19 % and it is followed by the fairly popular which is only 7 percent. Also, there are three other kinds of subjects which have similar pattern, and it is approximately 4,5 % which is specifically 4 percent (transportation), 4,5 % (utilities), and 4,7 percent (groceries), then there is the fairly lowest in this level which is also 5,5 percent (clothing).

On the other hand, generally Cape Alicia has lower cost than Riverdale. Utilities is the highest cost which is 1,2 % while housing is the lowest one in this trend. Health care and groceries have a similar pattern that they both are only 0,8 % and 0,5 %. Furthermore, clothing is the fairly highest on this level which was 1 %, and transportation is the fairly lowest which is only - 3,8 percent.





justivy03 - / 2267  
Apr 14, 2015   #2
Mohja, your analysis is quiet accurate, just check the following corrections;
1st sentence -average cost of living
2nd paragraph 1st sentence - "stood" - should be "stand"
2nd paragraph last sentence - "fairly lowest" should be "fairly low"
Last paragraph last sentence - "fairly lowest" should be "fairly low"

Mohja, make sure that you mind your numbers like 3,8percent should be 3.8%,it makes more appealing to the readers and since this is analytical,it will help send your message across.

Cheers!!!
lcturn87 - / 423  
Apr 14, 2015   #3
You didn't discuss a 7% percent figure in healthcare in the city of Riverdale. You only state the 7% figure in the paper. Please explain what this figure means so the reader can understand. In the second paragraph, state that these figures pertain to Riverdale. You don't mention Riverdale in this paragraph. Also, you have 4.5% listed wrong. Please, take out the comma between these numbers and write it according to the table chart.

Good job in the third paragraph! I'm glad you began the sentence referring to Caped Cod. If you make a comparison please state it is the lowest cost not the highest cost because you are trying to convey that the expenses are cheaper in Caped Cod in comparison with Riverdale. Please check over your percentages again. 1.2% is listed wrong. If you have a comma between two numbers, you should change it to a period. I want you to place a comma after 1.2% in the second sentence. The next sentence you should place a comma after pattern and state they are both 0.8% and 0.5%, respectively. Ex: When I read a statement like this I will know that the 0.8% represents health care and groceries is represented by 0.5%. You change your tense in the last sentence. Keep using the word is and not was. If you want to use fairly in this paragraph, you could describe percentages as fairly high or fairly low.


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