write a report for a university lecturer describing the information in the table
the table shows the output of two factories in their toy production from 2003 to 2007.
Factory A's output value steadily went up from 2003 to 2007. Increasing from 0.84 million in 2003 to 160 million in 2007, indicate a rise of 0.76 million. In the same period, factory B's output value, on the contract, sharply fell from 1.80 million in 2003 to 0.90 million, with a fall of 0.1 million each year. Although the output value in 2006 rose to 1.66, it dramatically decreased in 2007, indicating a fall of 0.76,
From the table, we can see that factory A's output value in toy production kept growing while factory B' one dropped all the time.
The cause of the decrease of factory B's output value must have been the poor management.
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Since the writer wrote far less than the minimum 150 words, there is no possibility that this analysis can receive a passing score. A conscious effort to meet the word count should be made to prevent the failure of the essay due to word count percentage deductions. It will be impossible for this work to receive even a low passing score since it is improperly written, little analyzed, and shows a lack of care in developing the presentation.
There is a lack of proper summary and there is no representation for the trending statement. These are 2 early scoring considerations that receive scores before the analyitical report is even considered by the examiner. Due to incorrect sentence and word formation, the writer cannot receive a passing GRA score either. He totally disregards English writing rules that cover how sentences are created (Each first word must start with a capital letter).
As an analytical essay, I cannot say that this writer has made an effort to achieve a passing score. It is the work of someone who is not serious with his work and does not care whether he passes or fails the test.
In writing task 1, there is no requirement to make a prediction like "The cause of the decrease of ..." Everything you have to do is to analyze the data and present it in a relationship with other categories, giving the readers an overall picture of the trends and the significant details. I guess the only sentence as your 3rd paragraph is your overview. It should never be placed there and instead, right after the introductory sentence.
"Factory A's output ... Increasing from 0.84 ..." - These 2 sentences were supposed to be only one. You made the second sentence one without a subject by carelessly separating it.
must have been " on the contrast" - you made no proofreading.