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IELTS 2:Talents naturally inherited and talents which are taught


gmad06 20 / 151 55  
Sep 5, 2013   #1
This is a common IELTS task and I wish to express my view on it also.

TASK:It is generally believed that some people are born with certain talents, for instance for sports or music, and others are not. However, it is sometimes claimed that any child can be taught to become a good sports person or musician. Discuss both these views and give your opinion

Nowadays, it is not surprising to witness such amazing talents from people around the globe. In most cases, they are regarded as fortunate to be born gifted. However, there are also others who are born without natural talent yet still successful in learning it through dedication and hard work.

Extraordinary skills are commonly perceived as inherited gifts due to the fact that it is beyond the capabilities of an average person and it is deemed unattainable regardless of any means. This theory has been further supported by reports given by scientists confirming the relation of human characteristics and genetics. Meaning to say, almost all the time a child is bound to inherit a talent from his parents. An illustration of this is seen in the entertainment industry, wherein most children of popular singers or dancers end up having the same career with their parents when they grow up.

On the other hand, it is not the end of the world for those who are not born talented. There are several ways available in acquiring a skill desired, a common path is through rigorous training. This alternative requires strong willingness and in some cases experiencing pain may be unavoidable. In countries like China, they train children at a very young age to prepare them for international competitions. This may sound beneficial to both nation and individual but seeing the photos distributed over the internet, it is apparent that children are having a tough time.

In my opinion, it is true that talent can be naturally inherited. But for some, it is also possible to have the talent a person aspires even though he is not born with it, one just needs to work harder to develop it.

zoha 8 / 19 3  
Sep 6, 2013   #2
such amazing talents from people around the globe.

Such is unnecessary here. And, amazing talents of people sound better to me.

end up having the same career with their parents when they grow up.

End up and grow up in the same sentence ?

Also, try to write a synonym for talent in some sentences.

Good luck
OP gmad06 20 / 151 55  
Sep 8, 2013   #3
thanks zoha, any suggestions on how to rephrase this one?

end up having the same career with their parents when they grow up.
dumi 1 / 6,928 1592  
Sep 13, 2013   #4
Nowadays, itIt is not surprising to witness such amazing talents from people with such amazing talents around the globe.

... it is not just for modern days, but it had been there throughout the history;
People have displayed and still display amazing talents irrespective of gender, region or any social differences.
You write well. Practice more with time so that you can aim for a very good score. Wish you good luck!
muffle 3 / 12  
Sep 13, 2013   #5
You will get a high score if keep
writing good like this. Good luck ! I wish I can write as good as you :(

end up having the same career with their parents when they grow up.

This sentence sounds ok with me.


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