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Teacher plays an essential and crucial role in the mental growth of a student: TOEFL


Jesli 1 / 2  
Dec 15, 2012   #1
Question: do you agree or disagree?Teachers should not make their social and political views known to the students in the classroom.

As is known to all, teacher plays an essential and crucial role in the mental growth of a student. Their opinion would more or less have an impact upon on the student's view. Some educators and parents harbor the idea that teachers should not make their social or political views known to the students in the classroom. However, it is an overstatement and it depends on the method in which teachers address to their students as well as the motivation.

Consider the method. If teachers convey their perspective in an objective and indifferent way, explaining and illustrating the reasons to the students, it is an exceptionally ideal educational method, which would help students learn how to analyze and read the world. Take my English teacher for example, when I was in the senior school, our English teacher always tell us his own opinions on the social or political events and provided us with backgrouds and possible reasons of these events which can bear closer analysis. These opinions, together with the analytical method, are beneficial to us, his students. Nevertheless, if teachers convey their perspective in a subjective way without any sound backgrouds, it will mislead the students, which should be forbidden in the schools. I have heard a story that a student, after listening to his teacher's opinion against the government, rushed into the administration building and attacked the officers to show his anger. After that, he was sent into prison and the teacher was severly punished.

Consider the motivation. If the teacher's motivation is to make the students better understand the society, he or she should convey their views to students. The teacher to the student just as the beacon lights to the voyage at night. The beacon lights tell the ships which way is correct and safety. The teacher tells the students the path leading to the truth. However, if the teachers' motivation is to advocate their own opinions and make the students become their supporters, it is the worst situation and should be totally eliminated.

In general, whether teachers should make their social and political views known to the students depends on thier methods and motivation.

dumi 1 / 6,928 1592  
Dec 15, 2012   #2
Their opinion would more or less have an impact upon on the student's view.

...."perception" is the most appropriate word here because the teacher influences the student to see things in a particular way :)

However, it is an overstatement and it depends on the method in which teachers address to their students as well as the motivation.

This line has not come right. Up to this point the flow was very good and your ideas were very clear. At this point you must express your opinion !

However, I believe that there is no such harm in expressing their political and social views to the students.
OP Jesli 1 / 2  
Dec 16, 2012   #3
Thanks a lot! But I am confused that whether it is appropriate to show my opinion directly?That is to say,use "from my perspective,in my opinion,from my point of view,etc "instead of using the sentences without the word "I"? Because using "I" seems like I am superior to the readers. Looking for your reply. ^^
dumi 1 / 6,928 1592  
Dec 16, 2012   #4
Because using "I" seems like I am superior to the readers. Looking for your reply.

Well.... your prompt says;

do you agree or disagree?

This means not only you are allowed to express your opinion direct, but in fact you should do that. Generally, it is recommended that you express your opinion direct in the introduction itself. It helps you take the reader in your desired direction of the argument. While I was preparing for TOEFL in 2010, that was the advice I received from many people who guided me. Also I secured 29/30 for TOEFL writing by following those instructions. So I would advise you to do the same : )
OP Jesli 1 / 2  
Dec 17, 2012   #5
perfectïź thanks you again!
Broese 1 / 6 2  
Dec 17, 2012   #6
overall pretty good. good luck


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