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IELTS - we should not let technology and make our lives simple?



farina 11 / 20  
Dec 10, 2011   #1
Topic: Technology is causing environmental pollution. Some believe that we should not technology and make our lives simple; while others believe that we should use it to control the problem. What is your opinion?

Technology is a blessing that has been bestowed upon us. Numerous eccentric discoveries have proved to be the felicity of the mankind and certain it is that they have made our lives comfortable. However, not everything is perfect; indeed technology does have some odious effects, like environmental pollution which we have to forbear. Pollution can be subdued, if we stop using the latest gadgets, but in my opinion technology can be auxiliary in controlling the pollution.

Firstly, if our lives are void of technology then we shall have the lives of primitive people, like those dwelt in the stone ages, trying to put on fire with stones, travelling hundreds of miles on foot taking weeks to reach their desired destination, no mobile phones, internet facilities, computers, making our learning and education slow. In addition to that our health system will be crippled without modern diagnostic process, operational technique and medication can give a way to various epidemic diseases especially AIDS. The strong intimacy of modern man with technology cannot allow him to live without it.

Secondly, scrupulous use of technology can help us to fight against the problem of pollution. For instance, the use of train engines running on electricity rather than the coal ones, proper disposal of garbage and it's recycling, clean sanitation system, all are made possible by technology.

Thirdly, if we do make our lives simple, the element of pollution will still be there. Burning of coal and woods is the most essential part of every inhabitant and this can most evidently destroy our ecosystem because of smoke and deforestation.

However, the opponents believe that we should be circumspect. We should not completely remove technology from our lives but decrease its utility, like walking to the nearer places instead of using cars.

Concluding, I concede that technology do have some draw backs but if we use it wisely then surly it can help us to control the problem of pollution.

roshan4 6 / 12  
Dec 13, 2011   #2
You are off topic you gave so much information about tradition time methods. In fact topic is on Technology is boom or cruse.

Last, but not least,

In conclusion (not concluding it it informal and not academic )

I would recommend you to search structure of the IELTS essay. As I see, you are lost with structure.

Argument essay structure/ Advantage-disadvantage/ Agree- disagree

Introduction: 1.General statement, 2. Topic statement, 3.Thesis statement 4. My opinion

Body 1: My first reason is that

Body 2: My second reason is that

Body 3 Last, but not least,

Conclusion: Is more than summary of essay.
stellastella 18 / 25  
Dec 13, 2011   #3
Firstly, if our lives are void of technology --> if we avoid using technology
Concluding ,--> In conclusion , To conclude
princedynasty 15 / 57  
Dec 22, 2011   #4
Firstly, if our lives are void of technology then we shall have the lives of primitive people, like those dwelt in the stone ages, trying to put on fire with stones, travelling hundreds of miles on foot taking weeks to reach their desired destination, no mobile phones, internet facilities, computers, making our learning and education slow.

If this is a topic sentence, I think that it may be too specific or too long.
It may be better for you to divide it into 2 sentences.
The first one is the main idea, which means if we lack technology, we will live like premitive people.
The second one is the developing sentence, which means how difficult the life will be for us if we live like premitive people.
:D
apidjakfar 2 / 12  
Dec 22, 2011   #5
both of statement in question is right, one hand, technology has dramatically improved the how we live in you can give some examples. on the other hand, it causes negative impact also to the way how we live, you can account for by giving examples,such as it will affect child development especially socially etc etc.


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