Teenagers have jobs while they are still students. Good Idea? Knowledge vs Money.

As we know became a student its not easy because you have responsible to your parents. But as a teenagers, we have many needs for living. If just take it for your parents maybe its not enough. Teenagers have jobs while they are still students, I think is a good idea. I have some reason why I say that.

Firstly, I ever have job while I'm still a student so I know. that is not easy, I must school from in the morning until evening and then I must work until night. I don't have many time for take a rest, hang out with my friend, and I might don't have time for my family. But, step by step I can understand, work not only use your power but you need strategy. Strategy that I mean you should be set your time, make schedule, and do it all with consistent.

Secondly, you're teenagers so you live in your family. Every day always with them. As teenagers that have work maybe you will be difficult to make your parents believe that you can school while work. They will say to you, the first and more important you must school. If you want to work just wait until you finish your school or university. But, can we wait until finish it? I think, we don't need to wait. If you really want to work you sure know what will you do to school while work.

In conclusion, Try think in your mind with school you can get knowledge, and with work you can get money. So if you want knowledge and money so you should be school while work. Actually, all of we can school while work if you can control your time and your mind.

As we know becoming a student is not easy because you have to responsible for your parents.


But as a teenager, ... .... If just take it for your parents, maybe it is not enough.

First, you should have posted your full prompt (topic) in this thread for us to understand what it really requires from you. Include it on the top of your essay;


You need to improve on the structure of your intro.

Many grammar mistakes.
Read a good grammar book.

As we know became a student its not easy because you have responsible to your parents(wrong grammar) . But as a teenagers, we have many needs for living. If just take it for your parents maybe its not enough(wrong grammar) . Teenagers have jobs while they are still students, I think is a good idea.(bad sentence) I have some reasonSwhy Ito say that.

Firstly, I ever have job while I'm still a student so I know. that is not easy, I must school from in the morning until evening and then I must work until night.(bad sentence) I don't have manymuch time for taketaking a rest, hang out with my friend, and I might don't have time for my family. But, step by step I can understand, working not only use your power but youalso need strategy. Strategy that I mean you should be set your time, make schedule, and do it all with consistent.

Thanks sir for your comment :)

I am sorry for many mistakes. but, i will study hard and insya Allah next, i do not have many mistakes. Aamiin :D

1.I don't have a time to take a rest.
2.I must go to school from morning until evening.
There are many grammar mistakes like preposition,sentence structure.

Hi Mrs.Ira, I think if you want to use the affirmative statements connected with and, after and you should S + V :)